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Clark ducked through the airplane door and stepped into the jet bridge with genuine relief. Twenty-four hours of confinement was a long time.

Particularly when, without the benefit of the flying crate, he could have saved himself twenty-three hours, fifty-nine minutes, and fifty-five seconds.

But that didn't matter. Not now.

He was back in Australia - and he had some time.

Time to be with Lois.

Time to make decisions about their future.

He was here for at least a week. Seven days ... seven nights. They could go out, they could stay in ... they could be together.
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Well done, I love the way you had both Perry & Lois kicking some sense into Clark.

I was delighted with Perry making it clear that life at the Planet can go on without Clark Kent.

Well done.


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That was fantastic! I had been moderately disappointed about killing Mayson as the easy way out. This was so much better! And Perry was great.

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Wow! Now my wish is that Mayson will wake up with no memory of anything that happened over at least the past week!!! Head injuries can cause all kinds of problems. smile1


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Wow, did not expect Mayson to survive. Wonder what you got cooked up next.

I'm quite intrigued by the way Lois and Clark handle their situations so differently. Clark's obsessing about endangering Lois and Lois is obsessing about Clark obsessing about endangering her. Okay, so maybe no so differently laugh

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"I'm here, Clark. I'll ... ahm ... just be a moment." She quickly pulled on the first clothes she found - jeans and a loose jumper ... there was no time for a bra or a t-shirt. She ran a hasty comb through her damp hair, took a deep breath, arranged a nice smile on her face, and opened the door.
There's got to be a purpose. /waits patiently/
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Lois grasped the bottom of her sweater and peeled it over her head.

Clark gasped ... and Lois shook with laughter.
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"Kent," she said. "You're *supposed* to be looking at my arm."
But you have to admit, distracting Clark form the booboo on her arm is a good idea. Except, isn't the nurse supposed to distract her little patients before patching them up instead of the other way 'round? laugh

Great part, as usual. Too little time for FDK. frown

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another fabulous chapter!!! I love the way you write Lois. And I'm glad Mayson didn't die and boy, I sure hope she's appreciative of Clark saving her when she wakes up!


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I'm kinda also glad that Mayson didn't die ... but it does makes me wonder what is going to happen next ... maybe she will kill Luthor and it will be like killing two birds with one stone?

Anyhow, loved the Lois and Clark part - very in character for both of them - Clark obsessing and Lois obsessing about Clark obsessing.

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Ok, so I was sure Mayson was going to die... but this was so far better than that option, because it lead to some great interaction both between Clark and Perry and then between Clark and Lois. For a second I almost thought Perry knew CK is Superman. He seemed to sense so clearly what the younger reporter was feeling.

As for the scene at Lois's apartment, I simply loved it. Loved how Lois asked him to smile for her. This bit is what really stood out for me:

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"*Listen* to me, Kent," Lois said, roughly backhanding her tears away. "I need you now. Right now, I need stuff from you ... and you're not giving it to me."

He swallowed. "What do you need?"

"I need you to smile."

His jaw dropped. "Lois ..."

"You have all those super-impressive abilities, but you've never realised that, for me, your most powerful power is your smile. It rights my world. It puts the pieces of my life back together when they've crumbled. It reaffirms that everything will be OK." She looked at him and offered a wobbly smile. "I love you, Clark."
I'm very very curious as to whether Clark will follow Perry's suggestion and actually go back to Metropolis married to Lois. And also really not sure if you're bringing the hottest team in town to Metropolis or the hottest superhero to Melbourne.

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What a treat. I read all the recent parts at once. It's a really great story. I'm anxious to see the end. And then, maybe sequels?
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I finished reading all chapters, and I have to tell you how much I liked it. I liked the twist on Lois history, and how smart is she here. I also like how wonderfully you portrayed your country and city and "footy".
Ultra Woman Lois' persona is great, and You created this long distance relationship with Superman and solved the problem really well.
As for the last chapter, I'm glad Mayson didn't die, it would be devastating for Clark.

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Framework Thanks. Sometimes Clark needs a little push in the right direction.

Amy When the ending of this fic was only vague ideas, I had thought Mayson would die in the explosion just as she did in canon. However, as the story progressed, I realised that leaving her alive made things more interesting. I'm glad you agree.

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Head injuries can cause all kinds of problems.
Uhm.

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Now what is that posting schedule now? EOD or ED??
EOD. Because that gives me a day in the middle to work on the fic my muse has become totally infatuated with.

Michael Glad you liked the 'purpose'. laugh

bellarase Mayson appreciative? confused cool

DW Your speculation isn't correct ... yet in a twisted way, it's not completely off track either!

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And also really not sure if you're bringing the hottest team in town to Metropolis or the hottest superhero to Melbourne.
This was such a great way of putting it!!

Artemis Welcome home!

Sequels ... not any time soon. As I've mentioned before, I've set it up that a sequel is possible, but after six months in this universe, my muse has escaped to something else.

However, there will be an epilogue.

immery Welcome to the boards. I'm honoured that your first post is FDKing my story!!

A really close friend of mine spent a year in your country and loved it.


Thanks so much to everyone who is still reading. Five parts to go!

Thanks for the FDK guys - it really is wonderfully encouraging.

Corrina.


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