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Thanks!

Corrina.

Wow, this story is stunning in its quiet ruthlessness of showing us all that Clark has been put through and Lois' growing intolerance of it. I can picture every incident vividly and painfully as Lois.

And here we see that Lois has a guilty conscious. Was her friend tortured?? All the more reason for her to not be able to stand what's going on with Clark, even knowing nothing about who he is.

So intriguing! Looking forward to the next part!

Great part again! You described Lois' feelings towards what Clark has been through and how he experienced everyday things very well

Ooh, and Lois has a guilty conscience? I guess we are going to find out what really happened to her and her partner through Lois' nightmares?

Looking forward to the next part

oh another amazing chapter!! THANK YOU! And thank you for the frequent updates - they are so very appreciated!

Read parts 3 & 4 today ... still horrified by what Clark has been through, but still completely riveted to this story. From your sneak peak above, I see one of my theories about why Clark doesn't speak was correct, that he was beaten every time he tried. Grrr.

As for Moyne, I'm glad Lois took his key, but obviously he's not going to give up that easily. I think Lois was on the right track when she wondered if Trask encouraged Moyne's sadism -- I bet they were in on it together. The other two agents, I'm hoping she can reach to give herself some allies. But in the meantime, I really hope her self defense skills are good, because I have a feeling things are going to get physical with Moyne. He is clearly one evil man.

So at what point can Lois call up her bosses and let them know what's been going on in the warehouse? Scardino seemed to be willing to consider the possibility that things weren't as Trask had reported; can she gather enough support to get all three of the agents there reassigned? And at the very least, get the conditions improved beyond what she's able to do personally? Or are the higher ups too worried about their rogue agents behaviors coming to light? I'll be interested to see how that all develops.

Kathy

Hmm... I wonder if TMTY 2 is going to be from Clark's POV. And if one of the TMTYs is going to be named Crossroads.

Uhm, why did she leave 'vile' in there?

Considering the next paragraphs, I wonder if Lois is first going to care or if it's simple curiosity that's going to get her to watch over Clark past her father's passing.

I wonder what he's thinking? Clark has had seven years to think. What's he going to make of the change in care? I'm guessing he assumes Trask got kicked out. Otherwise, why should he care? Or did he notice Lois through the one-way mirror and knows he's being watched by a woman?

That's interesting. And how's the sunlight getting into Clark's room. I know the one-way mirrors need a dark room on the other side, but does that mean he can now see Lois, too? And what will it mean for Clark to have access to sunlight. Will he revert to his basic nature of the 'vile, dangerous beast that is bent on slaughtering and enslaving billions of people'?

Now, see? That's how you feed the Kryptonian.

Michael

First off, I will say that I'm enjoying this story very much. It's a very original premise and has a lot of potential to go a lot of different ways while still allowing for the ultimate finally that folcs will want.

But,(you know there has to be a but every once in a awhile), Kathy brought up the point that has been bugging me.

Lois is in charge. She doesn't trust the three 'agents' who are currently assigned to the prisoner. Why can't/doesn't she change that? Why hasn't she called Daniel and had them reassigned elsewhere?

I imagine there is storyline reasons why you want those agents to still be around, particularly Moyne. But we need a reason why Lois hasn't done anything about them. I understand that Lois isn't operating on her normal level of competance. I get that she has pulled back into herself and just wants to 'phone it in' so to speak. But we also know that Lois can't really do that. We've already seen how she's getting affected by the horrific nature of the situation.

We need a line or two explaining that Lois had talked to Scardino about the guards but was talked into giving them some more time. After all they'd been there for a long time and knew the situation better than she does... supposedly.

She could even make a decision to hang with the group for a while just because she really isn't all that sure of what's she's gotten herself into.

But I think we need to 'see' that mental argument. We need to know why Lois is putting up with these obviously belligerant, disrespectful, and contrary 'employees'.

Looking forward to more.

Tank (who is going to enjoy the moment when Lois takes Moyne down... hard)

MozartMaid
Wonderful! That's what I was aiming for (although I didn't exactly have that very apt description in my mind.) I wanted the readers to understand how bad Clark's situation is, but I didn't want to completely gross everyone out.


DW

Some. But you won't find out the entire story until Lois finds someone she trusts enough to open up to.

Bellarase The frequency of the posts is related to how quickly I write. I don't want to start posting 'Bridge' until I have finished writing it, which means I need to spread out the final four parts of 'Junction'.

Kathy

I'm glad you got that!

I'll address your other point when I reply to Tank because you raise similar issues.

Michael

Sooooooooo close!

My oversight. Although, I could see her wielding the marker quite furiously, so it's sort of understandable that she would miss a few words.

Here's where I got my info from:

http://www.howstuffworks.com/question421.htm

It doesn't specifically say that light could go the other way, but from what it does say, I can't see any reason why the sunlight can't get into the cell.

I think that with Lois's office becoming lighter, the mirror effect would be lessened.

However, Trask had the window lined with lead, so Clark can't use his x-ray vision (when he gets it back) to see through the window.

Then there's the angle factor (he's below) and the fact that Lois's office is probably still not as brightly lit as the cell, so I don't think he would be able to see much.

Unfortunately, I don't have a one-way window/mirror to experiment with, but this seems the most likely scenario to me.

On a slight tangent ( ) - the exterior window to Lois's office is perpendicular to the window into the cell. Therefore direct sunlight will only get through both of them for a short time each day.

Tank

I'm going to try to answer your questions without giving too much away.

Firstly, Lois has been in the job for 2 days. When she arrived, she was overwhelmed with how much needed changing. Not even Lois Lane can change everything in two days. (And we all know how much we hate a new boss coming in and immediately demanding huge changes.) Also, this Lois has some issues of her own to deal with.

As the writer, I sort of had the same dilemma - what to deal with first

Secondly, Lois will go to Scardino, and she will get the answer she was expecting (which is another reason why she didn't go earlier.)

As I said at the start, my knowledge of secret agencies is zero, but I'm assuming things would be done in a certain way. In this universe, they are done that way which Lois would know well.

I discussed something similar to this with one of the BRs, and I really think that the order in which Lois tackles the problems would be highly individual. I can understand readers thinking ...'But why doesn't she just give him a bed? Why doesn't she go to Scardino and demand new assistants? Why doesn't she ask the prisoner if he killed the other assistants?'

They are legitimate questions, but if she fixes everything in 2 days, we don't have a story.

And, after all the damage done to Clark, my feeling is that slow progress will be more likely to be sustained.

And slow progress will lead to the development of trust - on both sides.

I hope that helps.


Thanks to everyone for the FDK.

Corrina.

ETA - Sorry, forgot this point.

Tank said ...

Yes, but there would be a heirarchy of authority. She can't do whatever she wants to. She is answerable to Scardino, who is answerable to someone else.

I love Lois for this.

Michael and I both had the same idea - Clark knows a woman is here. You say he can't see through the observation window, but there was this: Even though he's turned-away when she looks at him, I'm thinking he caught a glimpse of her when she opened or shut the door. Or heard her speak. I'm convinced Clark knows there is a woman in the building.

Loving this story. More, please.

Iolanthe Glad you liked it.

Vicki The longer Clark goes with less and less exposure to the K, the more his powers will return. You're right, he heard her. And sensed her, because as we all know, she is his soulmate!


Thanks to both of you for the comments.

Corrina.