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Thanks!

Corrina.

Oh noes! The police are there! Hopefully it will be Rachel Harris.

I have to question their judgement in returning to Smallville and bringing Clark Kent out in the open again but I definitely trust where you will take this story!! Loving it so much

Whoooeeee! Clark gaining some big insights into his own behavior and Lois passing his test were milestones I'm sure. His tender heart.

Loved in the preview how the young man remembered Clark not allowing any of the little kids to be bullied-- Great memory for someone who didn't know Clark very well! And the Kents' local grocer sent a boat-load of food for them unasked. I'm sure it reinforces Lois' take on Clark and his parents being wonderful people. Terrific stuff.

There was so much I absolutely loved in this part. For the first part, I admit I had a funny feeling in my stomach, feeling so much for Clark and what he was going through, pulled in by the wonderful descriptiveness of your writing. But then, as it continued, I felt as Lois did when she exclaimed that it was over and they were free. While I'm not sure that's necessarily true, I certainly appreciate these few moments.

Clark's insight into himself was amazing for someone who has spent seven years in a prison. That point was really emphasized when Lois thought of how much of a dream this all must feel, comparing it to her own escape from hell.

The homecoming was so beautifully done, drawn and realized just as if we were there with Clark, each detail bringing us a bit closer, each memory painting the picture a little fuller. And the emotions rioting inside Clark, the thoughts running through his head...it was all so...well, I already used the word beautiful, so I'll settle for amazing this time.

And I like how he chose to have Lois stay in his room so that he could keep that feeling of connection with her. It was sweet, and just the sort of little, understanding, hopeful gesture that Clark--of any universe, story, or show--would make.

One of my favorite parts was when Lois realized that he might never recover, but that she loved him anyway and would be there for him no matter what. The way she sees him is just so perfect and fitting, and I, too, wish he could see himself the way she does, but if he did, he wouldn't be Clark.

I also liked how she gets him to use his powers to help them, and how skillfully he was applying his sight. It's cool to see Clark actually using his powers.

Well, I had more parts I really liked--the whole part actually--but I'll try not to mention them all. It's getting better every time, I think. I can't wait for more.

Loved this part! Their returning to the farmhouse was so lovely -- And I think Clark needs it to feel reconnected to something again, so he can eventually really *be* with Lois. I liked the poetry of this part:
The opposites here are very telling about how far away Clark is from what his home used to be, yet it is still home. And I liked the detail you put in about the wall on the stair that he had banged into -- it is so true that it's imprints like these (well, not like Clark's-- but you know what I mean!) that you remember when you go back to a house or place you lived in. So good detail!

Delightful part.

Not Rachel as it was a male voice. However whoever it is I'm sure will know Clark.

Looking forward to more.

Great part again! I also think that Clark needs to connect to something again (and another piece to the puzzle of his recovery and another will be seeing his mom again and knowing that she doesn't resent him for what the government did).

My favourite part was:

I agree with Mozartmaid on this part!

Looking forward to more!

That was one of my favorite parts too. I loved the ironed pj's. The police was an unexpected twist but a good one I think.Great job as usual! I am looking forward to more soon. Laura

Lois needs to bust out her old Huey Lewis and the News cassettes and play "Stuck With You" for Clark.

So glad they finally know that Scardino and Menzies aren't chasing after them. Unfortunately, the relief was so intense that it overshadowed the information that Moyne is still AWOL. Between that exchange and Scardino's earlier cryptic message, Lois might have enough to make the great leaps that she's known for and put the pieces together that Moyne might be after them, but she's clearly too distracted to really focus on it.

Very poignant moment when Clark reached his home in Smallville. You described his emotions very well.

(One minor thing to look at before you archive the story, though -- I assume Clark was washing and drying everything by hand at super-speed since there was no electricity, but wouldn't "running the water until the build up was gone" be something he'd have to do at normal speed? He can't make the water run out faster, after all, even with his powers.)

I'm not worried about the police -- clearly someone noticed the car in front of the house and assumed the house has been broken into -- but I am worried now that Clark's presence will soon be known to everyone in Smallville. And that means Phil Decker, whoever he might be!

I did find it amusing, however, that Moyne apparently has very tiny feet for a man. With the rods destroyed with the skeleton (right?), he shouldn't have any weapons to use against Clark. I'm sure he'll come up with something completely evil to compensate, but at least he won't be able to kick him.

Kathy

Exciting end! I wonder if the 'police' will turn out to be Wayne Irig coming to check on the property!

Can't wait for the next part... as usual! LOL

Cheers
Elizabeth

I wish I could put in words how much I appreciate all the little details that went into this story. Things like Lois watching Clark's hands on the steering wheel awhile back, or last chapter's "You need a licence before you drive," and Clark's reply "I drove the car yesterday." (makes me chuckle every time I read it.)

I loved the trips to Metropolis and Clark using his supervision from up in the clouds. I was caught by surprise at Moyne having feet the size of a woman. I was as I read that Clark finally listened - really listened to Lois tell him she wasn't leaving.

The way you described Clark's return was

Lol at ironing the pj's. He's so sweet.

I wasn't expecting the police, but it makes sense. I'm looking forward to the Welcome Home for Clark (will Rachael be there? Lana?) Of course, this means Moyne will know he's here, too. I'm looking forward to seeing how that plays out.

Loving this story!

Bellarase

Good point - although you know more than Lois does.

Taking Clark home was done on impulse. She remembered her feelings after the month on the run - and at the time, she was a little shocked by Clark's sudden change in attitude. However, she thought about it while she was driving towards Smallville and realised that she could never be all that Clark needed.

Also, perhaps she's developing the ability to subconsciously tune into Clark - remember when he flew over Smallville and wished he could go home?

Evelyn Re the preview - I was trying to create a feeling of community - a kind of 'welcome home'. However, as you said, it goes deeper than that (which I didn't see) to saying a lot about the Kent family.

AntiK Thanks for such indepth FDK

I'm glad you liked Clark arriving home. As a child, I lived in a tiny farmhouse on a very quiet road. In my imagination, the Kent home has morphed with my memories. I'm not sure how realistic that is in a practical sense, but I think that special feeling of home applies everywhere in the world.

(And forgive me for not FDKing past the first part in your lovely fic. I've been writing my ficathon assignment and still trying to move forward with TMTY which hasn't left much time for reading/replying.)

MozartMaid I was drawing heavily on memories of my childhood home. No, we didn't have a Superman-caused dent in the wall but we did have a large divot where my dad threw a crowbar at a snake - and missed!

Framework Cops usually work in pairs, don't they?

DW

I agree (and anyway I needed it to move the story forward! )

Laura

Yeah. Although the part ended on what looked like a cliffy, it wasn't really. In the country where people look out for each other, you'd expect someone to come.

Kathy

The water - one of the unexpected surprises in writing and reading fanfic is that things can be very different in different countries. My assumption was that, being in the country, the farm would have large rainwater tanks. One of my BRs said that that was unlikely (in her part of the US. Another thing I've learnt is the amazing diversity of your country.)

So, I deliberately left it vague as to where the water was coming from. However, the farm still needs water, so it wouldn't have been disconnected from the property. The water to the house may have sat stagnant for seven years, but once those pipes were clear, the water should be fresh.

There is also the possibility that Wayne occasionally came into the house to use the bathroom while he was working on the farm.

Perhaps half a minute to return the bathroom to order was a little short. But if Clark had turned on all the taps/faucets first and let them run while he cleaned, I don't think it's completely out of the question that it was running clear in a shortish period of time. And if there were any little blockages, a spurt of heat might have helped!

Thanks for the comment though - if I write something that doesn't make sense, I appreciate being told

Re Moyne - in my mind, he's smallish. I've done a quick check of the early parts, and I never actually said that . But in the fight where he tried to get Lois into the cell, it was a struggle. He prevailed, but not easily. There's a line where Lois realises that he is stronger than her physically. I realise this is very subtle, but the fact that she even thought that was meant to convey surprise because his appearance doesn't suggest strength.

I'll fix it before it goes to the archive!

Elizabeth It is the police, but the important bit is what they want

Vicki

I'm glad you like the details. That has developed as I've written for this fandom. I used to leave out of lot of the little detail, thinking they were tangents and distracted from the story. However, FDKers have encouraged me to include them.


Many thanks everyone.

I'm not sure about the posting schedule for the next week. My plan had been to try to finish posting Trail and then post my ficathon assignment. However, that might miss the four week deadline for the ficathon, so I'm probably doing to have to suspend TMTY for a few days to post the assignment.

The end of Part 11 will be a good place for a small break - depending on the progress of my assignment, of course

Many thanks, as always,

Corrina.

hmmmm, I think we're talking about two different things. What I'm talking about has always been there. Maybe "details" wasn't the right word. I didn't mean so much "detailed descriptions" as, as, I don't really know what to call it. Whatever it is, it's quite subtle. How about "hidden treasures"?

Again I'm late to the party but that doesn't signify any less love for the chapter!

They're free! and Clark is home! <happysigh> Now if only Moyne wasn't lurking in the shadows. Maybe he can get trampled in a feeding frenzy of hogs? I hear sows are really mean.

On the subject of Moyne, it crossed my mine that maybe he went specifically to Irig's farm to work to be able to recover more Kryptonite (since that's where it was discovered in GGGoH right?). I really hope not.

I loved how they used Clark's abilities to spy on Scardino and Menzies.

Hmm, must be a rat. <L&C turn towards each other and in unison exclaim> Moyne!

Progress!

I loved the progression of Clark's thoughts as they approached the farm and when they finally arrived.

Awh.

Emily figured out, ARGH!!!! That is, of course, not only possible, but likely. So much for my theory that all Moyne could to do was threaten to expose Clark and kick him with his tiny feet.

Kathy

Well... well... well... Lois isn't going to leave him. There is no escape. Poor Clark. Maybe he should try flying away and hiding in the Congo? or the Arctic? And then, 6 months later, he gets hunt down by an Inuit, knocked over the head with a green rock and when he comes to, sees the Inuit is actually a Caucasian woman.

How about 'the next room'?

Okay, I'm thinking a nosy neighbor called the police. Because Moyne wouldn't try it like that. I think. Besides, the preview looks homey, so...

Michael