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Very nice. thumbsup

I like the way you've captured Clark's struggles through this period.

I like this section:
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I’ve seen how he looks at you. I have no doubt what he has in his mind, and I’m afraid it could be what you want.

I have seen how you look at him; you like him, as a friend … perhaps as more … I don’t know. And I don’t know if I really want to know.

Do you want me? Should I keep trying to be a part of your life? Or do you want him, and it would be easier if I left for good so at least one of us could be happy?
I can get a sense of what Clark's own insecurities -- and his unwillingness to open up and trust Lois -- are doing to him.

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Oh I truly enjoyed this!! The way you go into his head is perfect. Thank you for sharing this with us!


LOIS:I don't like you.
MAYSON: Really? Oh god, that is such a relief - I don't like you either.
LOIS: That makes me feel so much better
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You've done a great job of capturing Clark's feelings at that time.

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Very heartfelt! Really enjoyed reading Clark's thoughts and agonized feelings at that point in the story. You're right on!! thumbsup


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Yes, great job in expressing Clark's feelings and thoughts during that episode. clap

Thanks for sharing smile


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