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FDK: Somewhere between heaven and Hope part 2 #78688 04/27/11 06:49 PM
Joined: Feb 2011 Posts: 42 Jenna OP Blogger
OP Jenna Blogger Joined: Feb 2011 Posts: 42	Please give me your feedback on the story: part two Table of contents Jenna: "That's enough! You release the Charactors from this tragedy right now, you little gnome. Or I promise to send you somewhere far worse than the fifth dimension!" Kazbo sarcastically: "You have me so scared!" menacing: "try dealing with this!" throws in a slow, agonising death. then disappears. -from an arguement with Kazbo, the evil muse

Re: FDK: Somewhere between heaven and Hope part 2 #78689 04/29/11 02:06 AM
Joined: Nov 2010 Posts: 1,724 Likes: 1 out in the cornfields S scifiJoan Merriwether
scifiJoan Merriwether S Joined: Nov 2010 Posts: 1,724 Likes: 1 out in the cornfields	Love the kids thinking they're getting away with something while their parents have known about it all along. It's sweet that Clark is so protective of his daughter. You might want to consider getting a beta reader to help out with issues such as tense agreement. They can catch those annoying errors that spell check overlooks and that are easy to miss when you've read the story multiple times. You can just ask in the Fanfiction related area. This group has lots of helpful people.

Re: FDK: Somewhere between heaven and Hope part 2 #78690 04/29/11 12:38 PM
Joined: Feb 2011 Posts: 42 Jenna OP Blogger
OP Jenna Blogger Joined: Feb 2011 Posts: 42	Thanks for the feedback, Joan. I can easily see Clark as a protective father; especially of his daughters. I've never worked with a beta, so I'll see if it works out. thanks for the advice. Jenna: "That's enough! You release the Charactors from this tragedy right now, you little gnome. Or I promise to send you somewhere far worse than the fifth dimension!" Kazbo sarcastically: "You have me so scared!" menacing: "try dealing with this!" throws in a slow, agonising death. then disappears. -from an arguement with Kazbo, the evil muse

Re: FDK: Somewhere between heaven and Hope part 2 #78691 04/29/11 02:45 PM
Joined: Feb 2008 Posts: 2,823 IolantheAlias Pulitzer
IolantheAlias Pulitzer Joined: Feb 2008 Posts: 2,823	I get a kick out of Superman's daughter facing the usual teen angst issues. I can just see her saying, "Oh, Dad!" in that irritated voice.

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