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Nice, I liked the way you put this chapter together. You tied up a lot f ends here and I like how Henderson was in on the whole thing.

I'm glad to see that Clark is finally recovering. So it was the lack of sunlight that was keeping him from healing. And that pesky third bullet.

For a minute there I wondered if Lois was nervous about what Clark would say to Henderson, because of that 'green eggs and ham' bit from the previous part. Would he admit / say something to the Inspector he shouldn't? But I guess the pain meds had worn off by this point, because he seemed in charge of his wits.

So Henderson really does know Lois well.

I don't think Lois really had to use the ladies'. I think it was K that Lois flushed down the toilet. Not quite the Bermuda Triangle, but she needed to get rid of it fast.

It sounds like Henderson is implying that Lois has been in the hospital before and signed herself out using one of those forms. Perhaps she was shot one time that Clark doesn't know about.

So Clark doesn't want to know about his future. But he does now know that Henderson knows that Lois and Clark will be together in the future and have descendents... because how else would Tempus be familiar with how Lois Lane died? I couldn't see them teaching that in school if she was just a minor character (an ex-girlfriend) in Superman's history.

Side bar - In the S2 close episode, doesn't Clark/Superman read Tempus's diary before he burns it? I wonder what he learned?

So there are only 2 parts left? Wonder if Lois is finally ready to forgive Clark? Wonder what's up with Moose? Will they finally be able to eat tiramisu?

Literally floated? Wouldn't that behavior get a bit suspicious around the hospital?

He he, Moose can make just about anyone smile.

I had a feeling when he did a rush job with the interview that he might know...

Did someone plant this? I doubt Clark actually wrote it.

So that explains it! Tempus, meh

And it seems in this world---had none of the Tempus stuff actually happened to L&C? Unless, it just hadn't happened yet in their timeline, yet the journal shows up before it's supposed to... interesting twist.

Good luck, Henderson... Luthor is pretty good at disappearing and reappearing to cause trouble, no matter how dead or well guarded.

Great part again!

Loved that Henderson knew and it was

Good point, Virginia. I never really thought of the implications when Clark read the diary. I'm thinking there wasn't really *that* much stuff in there about how LnC came to be. They probably also didn't spread *all* the sordid details over the tabloids. And Tempus probably cared little enough about frogs and clones and evil philanthropists. Otherwise, Clark would be a reeeeeallllly dense one to read about the stuff *and* then propose before telling Lois. Break up with Lois. Let Lois run off with said evil philanthropist. Then there was the immoral shrink. Certain blue-blooded Kryptonians. Do I need to continue? So, no, unless he was scared senseless about changing the future, this stuff was not in the diary on show. And just because I wondered. The Kryptonite was mentioned in the diary. That's why Mazic needed Nigel on the show.

Loved how possessive drugged Clark was about his sunlight

Michael

I'm on my way to church, and haven't a lot of time, but I wanted to say:

1. I love this story!


Edited: This morning when I wrote this, I could not for the life of me remember the word I wanted. I even asked my family members, "What's that word that sounds like centrifuge, but means a divertionary tactic?" I finally gave up and just wrote "smoke screen". It wasn't until just now, as I was driving home in a torrential downpour that it hit me, "Subterfuge!"

Everybody is figuring out Clark's secret -

Love that Henderson is working with Lois and Clark.

Joan

Laurach:
I always figured that Henderson was smarter than he let on. If he figured out that CK=S, I can see him keeping his mouth shut about it until his curiosity is overpowering. Like wondering why Superman would get hurt by gunshots.

Virginia:
Um, see Darth Michael's quote below.

Mozartmaid:
Um... not thinking about that... um... just needed something for the plot... um... don't tell anyone...

DW:
See above re Henderson. And I think that Lois would always make sure that any kryptonite in Clark's vicinity gets destroyed. The tough part in this case was getting Henderson to give up the K-bullet. Fortunately, (or via Deus Ex Machina Plot Device) Clark had another bullet right there just waiting to be swapped out!

Darth Michael:
The great thing is, that since Tempus's diary was mentioned in passing but was never really thoroughly explored, I can say what I want about it! (see above regarding Deus Ex Machina Plot Devices. )

Regarding the Against Medical Advice form:
You know, Michael, that's exactly what I was thinking about Lois! She'd talk to her doctors just like that!

Vicki and scifiJoan: Thanks for the kind words!

Actually... that's the same thing HG Wells thought when he made them forget all that happened. Unless I missed something, everything's fine with the timeline

Michael

So much awesomeness in one chapter! I LOVE that Henderson knows. He's a great cop and a great character. I wish he'd been in a few more episodes actually. Thank God someone saw through Clark's "murder" at the hands of Al Capone and his gang.

I liked the use of the journal and Tempus too.

A few favorite lines:

Nice one Henderson!

Seriously LMAO on that one.

Ahahahahahaha!