Such a lot happening in just the first installment! I like how you took the time to establish the atmosphere in the first couple of paragraphs. Made me feel Like I was in Metropolis,
"onboard a freighter called Shackleton." heh
nicely written Bobby Bigmouth - he's a fun character and you've captured him well.
Loved "street epicurean"
ah, so lois doesn't know the Secret yet.
Binoculars in the purse - very Lois.
I enjoyed the banter between L & C when they were in the car. So they're very aware of each other, but not sure how to move the relationship ahead.
Will there be a love triangle? Hmmm wait and see.
Oh I hope not! So how old is Aykira? - she reads like a woman of a "certain age" --- so she and Bill Henderson maybe? It's always good to have Henderson in a fic, imo. And he would be a nice contrast to her uber-sophistication and competence - could be chemistry there - just saying.
But will it be Luthor and Aykira? Something mysterious about Aykira - who is she really?
Looks like an intricate A plot too.
Interesting start, Morgana.
I see that you have improved the story adding still more details. Your descriptions are always so rich that I can see the story you're telling as if I was watching it. 
in and beyond the sense of just being a villain- and as such I really like how you're going into his character more in depth in this story! 
You're writing style is really descriptive and strong with regards to imagery. I'm curious as to just who this Aykira is- and more importantly, who does she truly love 
(me seeing potentials for various love triangles and/or future emotional havoc...)
