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Last edited by VirginiaR; 05/12/14 02:56 PM. Reason: Fixed broken Link
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"On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling"
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“You’ve got me, Lois,” Clark murmured, lowering his voice. “I’ve come for that black chiffon number we discussed last night.” *would pay good money to see that, just for kicks* Lois grinned naughtily, setting her hand on his chest. “I actually had been tempted to wear it today. If you asked to borrow it, it would have left me with…”
Clark swallowed. “Nothing.”
She pointed her stir stick at him. “Precisely.” I love the banter. It's so very Lois and Clark! “Lois, I want to go out with you!” He had spoken so loudly, the bullpen had gone quiet. Oops! Gotta use your *indoor* voice there, Clark. She saw some money pass from desk to desk over in the sports department. Thanks guys for betting against me again.  “It’s not every day that I tell a man that I love him,” Lois whispered, gazing up at Clark. “While jumping off a cliff.”
Clark blanched. “Excuse me?”
“Oh? That wasn’t you. My bad.” Damn. It had been worth a shot. Oh, God! Then that means she just told Clark she really loved him. Niiiiiiiiice! Knowing he was nervous too, calmed her. Awww! Love this! “Can we start with that initial date first? And work our way up to 3 a.m.?” Clark asked with care.
Oh, gosh, had she really implied that to Clark? She smiled demurely, feeling a slight flush rise to her cheeks as she opened to mouth to respond. At that moment Jimmy came up to her desk and interrupted. How delicious! And of course, Jimmicus Intteruptus! Lois laughed. “Well, here’s to lucky number four.” Yeah, right, Buster. You’re not Superman. *wonders just how badly Lois is going to torture Clark* “Zip home and pick me up some of that Cheese of the Month you’ve been bragging about?” she suggested. Two could play this game. If he was going to throw out some dodgy excuse, the least she could do was make it a better one.  She scooted her chair closer to him as she faced him to yell, “I spent all day Saturday tracking down a handwriting sample from Superman to compare that to and it was written by you the entire time!” And he's letting her say this in front of Perry? He really *is* in love! Clark moved his chair closer to hers as well. “If you hadn’t run off on your fool’s errand leaving me high-and-dry at the office, I would have been able to correct you on your asinine assumption earlier.” Clark you idiot!!!!!!!!!!!!! She shrugged. “Clark and I always act like this. Dating or not.” That's....actually very accurate. Must. Post. Epilogue. Now.
Battle On,
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"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
"One little spark of inspiration is at the heart of all creation." ~ Figment the Dragon
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“I still think that the restaurant down the street…”
Lois raised an eyebrow at her partner. What was up with him?
Jimmy opened his menu. “Do you think they’ll let me add a fried egg to my ham and cheese?”
A shadow darkened their table as their cute, blonde, bouncy waitress approached. Clark actually cringed. Had he dated this woman? The server took one look at them and her eyes turned black and fierce. “Hi, my name is Candy,” she growled with a sneer. “And there is no way in hell I’m going to be your server today.”
Oh!  Silly Lois. Of course it works. Clark practically worships you 
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“It’s not every day that I tell a man that I love him,” Lois whispered, gazing up at Clark. “While jumping off a cliff.”
Clark blanched. “Excuse me?”
“Oh? That wasn’t you. My bad.” Of course! Perfect! And of course, this will confirm the CK=S equation for Lois. "And if you had signed that note I never would have agreed to go out on a date with you,” Uh oh. Trouble in paradise. And so close to the end of part three, too. No wonder the need for an epilogue. Perry whistled and formed a T with his hands. “Time-out, you two. As of this moment I’m installing a no-dating policy at the Daily Planet.”
She turned to her boss and placed her hands on the table. “NO!”
At the same time Clark pleaded, “Chief!”
With skepticism Perry looked between the two of them. “No?” Perry to the rescue! Gotta love it. “So, Smallville, where’s my cheese?”  Looking forward to the epilogue. Joy, Lynn
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Virginia, I would want to slap Lois to get her to wake up and stop second-guessing her CK=S intuition if not for the fact that it's wonderful that, as someone already pointed out, she's almost too focused on the more important fact that CK loves L to care about CK=S.
Well done!
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Very sweet. I love how you wove in the dialogue from when Clark really asked Lois out in the show. Having Lois know beforehand was a neat twist. Had to laugh when Perry wisely threatened to end fraternization among employees--that certainly got a reaction! Looking forward to the epilogue.
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Great Story, I've always liked romantic comedies better anyways. I had been gearing for revelation in this chapter, but of course you found a better note to end at. Oh well, I suppose that's what epilogue's are for :rolleyes:
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Wonderfully WAFFY ending. Short but sweet. Loved it! 
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Deadly Chakram: Am I the only one who could live without seeing Dean Cain in black chiffon?  Love the "indoor voice" phrase. Thanks for the review. Wow! Thanks again everyone for the great feedback. Will try to post epilogue before I go to bed tonight so you can enjoy it with your morning coffee... Breakfast for Reporters!
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What?! No comment on Jimmy wanting a 'Fried Egg' on his ham and cheese? So, totally thought you'd catch that reference to "Gofer No More"... <Lynn slaps her forehead> So *that's* why this part was dedicated to me? Nope. It slipped right by me. But I'm honoured that you alluded to one of my stories in your story. Oh, dear, stitches? I hope you're okay. No more stitches now -- which means that it is time to read the epilogue.  (Unfortunately, I won't actually have the time to do so until tonight at the very earliest. It will soon be time to get ready for work.) Caught the name 'Candy' in the script for HoL When I named Jimmy's almost-bride 'Candy,' I hadn't realized that there was a 'Candy' who almost made it into the show. I just checked the script for HoL and couldn't find anyone with that name there. Could it have been a different script? and said, oh, I know where to end this story. I loved her cameo. Joy, Lynn
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Oops...Meant to post in the epilogue feedback. Sorry!
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She still wasn’t allowing herself to hope it was her. Poor Lois. She so needs an Ivy. “I’ve come for that black chiffon number we discussed last night.” It would just look perfect on the girl I want to ask out. “I actually had been tempted to wear it today. If you asked to borrow it, it would have left me with…” Oooooo, this Lois has her Ivy already absorbed Clark swallowed. “Nothing.”
She pointed her stir stick at him. “Precisely.” Poooor Clark. Michael
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Lynn: Sorry,  not HoL but the one before that BatP, when they go to the cafe and Lois says she's not going to cry in her cappichino. Michael: Sorry, IVY is from GEM. Is she actually considering getting high? But why? Is she scared? And if so, wouldn't Clark touch her only with tongs if she were scared and high? I never thought of 'Revenge' as getting high, but OK. Just a joke on her 'best perfume'. Poor confused Lois. May we hit Clark now? Only if your medical premiums are up to date. “Superman finally got her pregnant,” Jimmy mumbled back. Loved the missing line.  She doesn't sound too bimboish. Lois had never met Candy. 'Bimbo' was just Lois's impression of her from Jimmy's phone conversation. Says a lot of making assumptions about people without meeting them first.
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Originally posted by VirginiaR: Sorry, not HoL but the one before that BatP, when they go to the cafe and Lois says she's not going to cry in her cappichino. Really? I had thought that quote:
“It’s still a beautiful sight.” Their boss sighed.
“It sure is,” agreed Lois as her eyes came down and met Clark’s. was almost exactly from HoL, where they are looking at the Planet's globe that has just been returned to the DP building site. The online scripts for HoL says: CLARK (per the globe)
I've never seen anything so
beautiful in all my life. IIRC, the show as aired changed it so that Lois says that line and Clark -- looking right at her -- agrees. (Sorry, I don't have time to go back and look at the actual ep now.) Joy, Lynn
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Lynn: Candy was from BatP cafe scene. Beautiful line referenced HoL.
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Lois had never met Candy. 'Bimbo' was just Lois's impression of her from Jimmy's phone conversation. Says a lot of making assumptions about people without meeting them first. Well, it's her own fault. Her name's Candy and she was willing to speed-elope a drunken Jimmy Michael
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