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Excellent start. You've got me wondering what's going on with Clark. Can't wait to see how you develop this.
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I agree, off to a good start.  I see that Herb is going to be involved. That should make it very interesting. 
Herb replied, “My boy, I never say … impossible.” "Lois and Clarks" My stories can be found herekj
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Ooh, very interesting! Clark's odd temperment, along with an almost-reversal of emotions, makes it very intriguing indeed! And for the record, I like B-plot.  And did I spy a little HG Wells, as well? Intriguing... Looking forward to future chapters! 
Nothing spoils a good story like the arrival of an eye witness.
--Mark Twain
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Merriwether
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I'm intrigued. You've got me wondering what happened between them. Can't wait to see where this goes.
Superman: I hear you've been looking for me.
Lois: All my life.
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I'm intrigued too! Looking forward to the next part 
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Top Banana
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Excellent start! I'm in for sure! I want more!!
Reach for the moon, for even if you fail, you'll still land among the stars... and who knows? Maybe you'll meet Superman along the way. 
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Very interesting start! Can't wait to see where you take us! 
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This is a great start! Keep going!
Morgana
A writer's job is to think of new plots and create characters who stay with you long after the final page has been read. If that mission is accomplished than we have done what we set out to do, which is to entertain and hopefully educate.
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That was just enough to get us hooked, you know that right? I'm fascinated to find out why Clark is so upset, why Lois is denying her feelings for Clark, and also why H.G. Wells is talking to Jimmy! More soon please! Amber
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Thank you so much for all this feedback. You guys make my day. I'm trying to post every two or three days. Real life is keeping me busy all the time and the next installment will be on Saturday, I suppose.
It's never too dark to be cool. 
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Wow, very emotional, quite sad! I'm sorry to see such anguish already apparent, and yet at the same time, I'm drawn in because I really want to see where this story goes. Lois's sadness doesn't seem to have any guilt in it, so I don't think she managed to drive him away. In fact, she seems almost confused about his coldness toward her, so I have to wonder if there's a bad guy threatening her if he gets too close.
Great job! Thanks for sharing!
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So we have Lois daydreaming about being close to Clark and Clark protesting about working with Lois. :p Great start. I loved the way he smiled; it was like the dawn of a new day, a perfect sunrise, warming my heart from within.  Corrina.
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