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Laura, good beginning to this, but you're starting to worry me. The WHAM coming up just doesn't sound very good for the baby. Even if it seems Lois will pull through whatever health disaster is pending, I'm still wondering if their child will make it. I'm crossing my fingers, hoping things work out for all. She could get used to this queen-like treatment. Even though she felt huge and immobile, Clark still made her feel cherished and beautiful, and he bent over backwards, trying to I think you may be missing part of this sentence/paragraph. Also, Martha was exasperating the situation. Were you looking for the word, "exacerbating"? More soon!
-- Roger
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I like the beginning, but I too cant help but wonder what will happen to the baby.  I love babies! Post more soon! Julie
Mulder: Imagine if you could come back and take out five people who had caused you to suffer. Who would they be?
Scully: I only get five?
Mulder: I remembered your birthday this year, didn't I, Scully?
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Well, the title was intriguing, so I checked this out. All the foreshadowing is making me very nervous, but this is fascinating. I loved watching Clark be so tender and protective of her, and there were some great lines in there. “Like I trust your taste! You'd think I was beautiful even if I wore a paper bag!”
“Yeah, but in my defense, you look good in brown.” lol! I do hope the baby survives... PJ
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“Yeah, but in my defense, you look good in brown.”  Laura, I'll say right up front that I'm not a big fan of pregnancy fics and even a less a fan of pregancy-gone-wrong fics. My own experiences speaking there, I suppose. Be that as it may, I'll try and stick around for this one. Great job of showing typical frustrating mood swings there, although you're clearly foreshadowing something more ominous. Why not post more soon, so we can find out?  Hazel
Lois: You know the deal.
Clark: Superman gets the guys in capes, Lois and Clark get the guys in suits.
-- Action Comics 827
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Great start, Laura!! But I'm worried... More soon! Jose 
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Hey Laura -
Great set up. I'm really anxious to know what's going on with Lois. Could it be that the baby is ready to make an early appearance???
I'm excited to read the next installment...
Lynn
You know that boy'd walk on water for you? Or he'd drown tryin'. -Perry White to Lois in Just Say Noah
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Hi, Great start. 
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Laura An excellent start!  Luckily Martha and Jonathan are there to look after Lois. Tricia 
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Laura, this looks like an interesting set-up. When I read your definition of amygdala, I immediately thought that Clark would be the one to go haywire, but now that there's pregnancy in the air, I'm really not so sure!
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Nice set up, Laura. It sure sounds like you've got some whams coming up (yay!! ), but I'm really worried about the baby. Good thing Martha and Jonathan are around. Now come back here and post more! Saskia
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Thanks for all of the coments, Roger (I fixed those grammar things -- thanks!), Julie, Pam, Hazel (thank you for reading, but I can almost guarantee you won't like this story), Jose, Lynn, Maria, Tricia, Yvonne, and Saskia. I'm sorry, I meant to post the next part yesterday, and I am sorry my reply was so short, but I am pretty sick . I will try to post later tonight.
Laura "The Yellow Dart" U. (Alicia U. on the archive)
"A hero is an ordinary individual who finds the strength to persevere and endure in spite of overwhelming obstacles." -- Christopher Reeve
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