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To make up for my two short ones, apparently my muse decided I had to write a longer one. Thoughts? 
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"Being with you is stronger than me alone." ~ Clark Kent
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What a smart muse!
Poor Clark. Everyone always wants to kill him. <3 Can't wait to see how this plays out!
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 I was worried when Lex started talking about the fireworks at the beginning... and yep, he was still evil! What's going to happen to poor Clark? Kryptonite poisoning? Drowning? Metropolis polluted with K-dust that Superman will have to move out of town? What's Lois going to do when she discovers that Clark is nowhere to be found? You can't leave us here! <<bites fingernails>> At least, let us know your posting schedule.
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Ooh! You've got me hooked. I like that Lois and Clark just decided to start dating (YAY!) and the climictic ending. Can't wait to find out what Lois thinks in the next chapter when Clark stands her up at Antonio's... (Also, liked the subtle jabs at Luthor throughout this. Makes you realize how much simpler life would be for Lois and Clark if Lex were simply not a factor in it.  Of course, I still love Lex, so I guess he's a necessary evil at this point.)
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Yummy! You had me at the first line! As per usual I don't have time to read this right now. 
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Originally posted by MrsLuthor:
What a smart muse!
Poor Clark. Everyone always wants to kill him. <3 Can't wait to see how this plays out!  Hi, MrsLuthor! Yup. Poor guy. That bright red cape of his makes him an excellent target, doesn't it? 
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</font><blockquote><font size="1" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">quote:</font><hr /><font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">Originally posted by VirginiaR: <strong> I'll probably post every other day or so, depending on how quickly I can get the rest polished and prepped for the boards, plus some personal stuff going one, *especially* this week. Yup, Lex is always, always, always evil.
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Originally posted by Mouserocks: Ooh! You've got me hooked. I like that Lois and Clark just decided to start dating (YAY!) and the climictic ending. Can't wait to find out what Lois thinks in the next chapter when Clark stands her up at Antonio's...
(Also, liked the subtle jabs at Luthor throughout this. Makes you realize how much simpler life would be for Lois and Clark if Lex were simply not a factor in it. Of course, I still love Lex, so I guess he's a necessary evil at this point.) Hi Mouse! YAY! Glad I could hook you in. And I'm *very* glad you like the way I ended it. I think you'll appreciate the way I ended chapter 2 as well... Yes, Luthor really is a necessary evil. But that's okay, because life for Superman without villains would be boring and make for very short fics indeed!
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Originally posted by Morgana: Yummy! You had me at the first line! As per usual I don't have time to read this right now.
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What a cliffhanger! Poor Clark! What did you do to him? Yes, yes, I know, it's not you, it's Lex... One chapter and I'm already hooked!
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"Beautiful, isn't it, Asabi?" Lex Luthor asked, turning to his faithful man-servant. Okay? He put his back to the large window in his office that afforded him a stunning view of the bustling city of Metropolis. Ah yes. "One simple firework," Lex replied, smiling at the brightly colored paper of the tube. Huh. Lex smiled, an evil light in his eyes. "Very good, Asabi. No, it's not. It's not ordinary at all." Oh dear. It’s filled with Kryptonite. Make sure it's mixed in with those to be shot off during the grand finale." Michael Edit: Yes, Luthor really is a necessary evil. But that's okay, because life for Superman without villains would be boring and make for very short fics indeed! /points at long nfics that have no bad guys at all. Or at least, not in any story-supporting fashion but rather as seasoning/
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Originally posted by Sydney: What a cliffhanger!
Poor Clark!
What did you do to him? Yes, yes, I know, it's not you, it's Lex...
One chapter and I'm already hooked!
 Sorry, this author can't resist being evil. Poor Clark indeed! Thanks for stopping in! More soon, I promise!
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Oh dear. It’s filled with Kryptonite. Right. Purely coincidental. But it does have a beautiful, green glow when it explodes. Yes, quite shiny too. Bill Church Sr. /deadpans/ But, but, but...he told the truth!  And somehow didn't hit any red lights. Let’s hope none of them like fish. "Fish are friends, not food!" Although, maybe one has developed a taste for sushi? Baby shark. Tempus? He stalks lasanga. I just realized, it’s past May and Lex is still alive Is that a side-effect of his not dating Lois? Or is that all because Clark arrived in Metropolis in September instead of in May? Dating Lois was hazardous to his health. Ummm Oh, right. She said *little* details. Glad someone caught that! Okay? /starts chewing at nails/ Oooh, that's a bad habit. Of course, I don't blame you... So is Lex. Hey! That’s that’s *EVIL*! <points to evil author membership card and jacket> Just how big is it? Because originally, I thought, maybe the size of a soda can, tops. /goes back and rereads/ Oh, the size is not mentioned. It's not. But I thought the big display rockets were a decent size, at least as long as a roll of paper towels. Soon. Very soon. I promise. /points at long nfics that have no bad guys at all. Or at least, not in any story-supporting fashion but rather as seasoning/ True. Got me on that point.
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And somehow didn't hit any red lights. No, he only does that when his mind is inside Lois. ![[Linked Image]](http://cosgan.de/images/midi/verschiedene/c050.gif) "Fish are friends, not food!" Although, maybe one has developed a taste for sushi? Michael
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No, he only does that when his mind is inside Lois. Also, quite easy to catch. And when it’s no longer easy to catch, it might not be worth the effort anyway.
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Great start. You got my interest right from the intro. "Sorry to intrude on sacred ground," he teased. Lol. That was a cute line. Would they ever be one of the happy couples - or, better yet, happy families - sitting in the park one day? Awwww.... And yet, it did not fall straight down into the small lake where the fireworks were being shot from an unmanned boat. Instead, it arced over the crowd, heading for the thick of the gathered families. Oh, right, this makes more sense. The need for a Superman rescue. I had assumed kryptonite in Lex's stick, but for some reason had envisioned the firework exploding as part of the display, then raining K down on the ground. Which, when you think about it, makes no sense, as what would make Lex think Superman would be in the picnic area watching fireworks?  Then he dropped like a stone, his powers utterly abandoning him. Quite a cliff-hanger here! Please post more soon! PS - I think the setting sun's rays would have been horizontal, not vertical. No?
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Great start. You got my interest right from the intro. Excellent! Lol. That was a cute line. Thanks. It made me smile when I wrote it. Oh, right, this makes more sense. The need for a Superman rescue. I had assumed kryptonite in Lex's stick, but for some reason had envisioned the firework exploding as part of the display, then raining K down on the ground. Which, when you think about it, makes no sense, as what would make Lex think Superman would be in the picnic area watching fireworks? Exactly. It's all about the insurance policy. Making sure Superman gets there to be exposed. How do you do that? Create an emergency. Quite a cliff-hanger here! Please post more soon! Thanks! Probably more tomorrow! PS - I think the setting sun's rays would have been horizontal, not vertical. No? Oh, right. Duh!  Thanks for pointing that out.
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OOHH NOOO! Not the cliffhanger ending! What's going to happen next!?!?!
Please post more soon.
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Originally posted by IolantheAlias:
OOHH NOOO! Not the cliffhanger ending! What's going to happen next!?!?!
Please post more soon. I couldn't resist! Arguing with my muse is an excercise in futility. More is definitely coming soon!
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Has it been two days yet? Is Part 2 coming tonight? 
VirginiaR.
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