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Originally posted by VirginiaR: Has it been two days yet? Is Part 2 coming tonight?  Does right now work for you? I was going to try and hold off for tonight, but I really like the next part so I thought I'd be generous. 
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Well, Clark only ever does the full-fleged full-court press investigation of Luthor with Jimmy, Jack and Perry because 1- Lois is engaged to Luthor and he wants to stop the marriage and 2- much lower down in importance, he is mad the Planet building blew up and 3 (at same level or a bit higher than 2) they know Jack was framed.
If Luthor had not been plotting to corner Lois into marriage, he would not have bought the Daily Planet, and Clark would not have had much incentive to investigate him. So this scenario seems to work to me.
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Originally posted by John Lambert:
Well, Clark only ever does the full-fleged full-court press investigation of Luthor with Jimmy, Jack and Perry because 1- Lois is engaged to Luthor and he wants to stop the marriage and 2- much lower down in importance, he is mad the Planet building blew up and 3 (at same level or a bit higher than 2) they know Jack was framed.
If Luthor had not been plotting to corner Lois into marriage, he would not have bought the Daily Planet, and Clark would not have had much incentive to investigate him. So this scenario seems to work to me. Thanks, John. That was right along with my thought process on this one too. And without Luthor to completely mess with Lois' mind, Clark could have asked her out much earlier. (No declatation of love to stop the wedding = no retraction = no Lois pulling away = less time wasted.)
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Actually the declaration of love, Lois rejection is the main problem. Lois asks him to go to the Kerth Awards banquet with her, and does not in any way say "it's not a date" like she did back in the pilot. Lois has not withdrawn, Clark has just misread her initial shock at his declaration of love.
Plus without the pain of the "I would love you even if you were an ordinary man"/"under the cercumstances I can not believe that" there is just not as much hurt and fear on Clark's part.
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Originally posted by John Lambert:
Actually the declaration of love, Lois rejection is the main problem. Lois asks him to go to the Kerth Awards banquet with her, and does not in any way say "it's not a date" like she did back in the pilot. Lois has not withdrawn, Clark has just misread her initial shock at his declaration of love.
Plus without the pain of the "I would love you even if you were an ordinary man"/"under the cercumstances I can not believe that" there is just not as much hurt and fear on Clark's part. I meant she pulls away a little after he retracts his declaration of love. She's about to tell him that she cares for him (he's the reason why she said "no" to Lex). Then he says he was lying and she pulls away, thinking he just wants to be friends. Yes, the ordinary man thing - that actually comes into play (in a way) in the last chapter of this story. I kind of turned it on its head a bit. 
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I like how this is starting out. A leisurely time between two friends watching a fireworks display. Than BANG! Everything goes wrong! I was actually chilly as Lois dived into the water to save Superman. Nicely done.
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Originally posted by Morgana:
I like how this is starting out. A leisurely time between two friends watching a fireworks display. Than BANG! Everything goes wrong! I was actually chilly as Lois dived into the water to save Superman. Nicely done. Thanks, Morgana! You know me. Never one to pass up an opportunity to make the reader go. 
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Finally got a chance to sneak back in here and knew I had to read this story -- love the opening here! Definitely sets up lots of great opportunities to develop things. Luthor sounded just like himself, going on and on about his dastardly plans. Genius always needs an audience, I guess. Poor Clark! Hope the Kryptonite doesn't hit him too badly! I know you would have warned me if this was a deathfic!  And just when things were looking up for him! Got to go find out what happens next!
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Originally posted by AntiKryptonite: Finally got a chance to sneak back in here and knew I had to read this story -- love the opening here! Definitely sets up lots of great opportunities to develop things.
Luthor sounded just like himself, going on and on about his dastardly plans. Genius always needs an audience, I guess.
Poor Clark! Hope the Kryptonite doesn't hit him too badly! I know you would have warned me if this was a deathfic! And just when things were looking up for him!
Got to go find out what happens next! AntiK! AntiK! Are you back for a while now?? Plllllease? Rule One of Bad Guy Handbook - Also wax poetic about your plans to someone, preferably a minion or a hostage. No, not a deathfic. I definiately would have warned you in our email exchanges. Thanks for popping in!
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Hello DC!  I made one comment on this story and did not finish it. Well, for once I have a little time, so the problem needs to be fixed ASAP! Lex has to talk about his low-down plans and who better to talk to than Asabi? It was also a cool history lesson! Thank you for that. This sweet little summer fic is great! Just what I need to delve into as the temperatures here in North Carolina climb into the stratosphere.  Now where is my mint julep? Lois giggled and arched an eyebrow. "Ambush?"
Clark laughed at the memory. "Yeah. That cat's favorite activity was laying in wait for unsuspecting passersby and attacking them."
"Bet he was a good mouser."
"Oddly enough, no. That cat couldn't have caught a dead mouse if you dropped it right in front of his face." He shook his head. "Anyway, here. I got you a cream soda on my way back." Sigh... Sounds like my cat... Clark nodded in return, ignoring Lois' self-jab. "It's been an amazing year, knowing you. When I first came to Metropolis, I had no idea what I would find waiting for me. I'm so thankfully that what I found was you. And I was wondering..." He fumbled for words for a moment before continuing. "You're my best friend, Lois. As I've gotten to know you, more and more, I've come to realize something. You are...exactly...that is...I have wanted...it's been so hard to...uh...I think we..."
Lois laughed a little. "Clark?" The playful exchange between them is so Lois and Clark. I can actually hear Teri and Dean's voices. In any case, really looking forward to reading the rest of the story this evening. What a great treat!
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