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Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (37/??) #89350 09/08/12 05:28 AM
Joined: Apr 2007 Posts: 9,066 Likes: 31 Darth Michael Boards Chief Administrator Nobel Peace Prize Winner
Darth Michael Boards Chief Administrator Nobel Peace Prize Winner Joined: Apr 2007 Posts: 9,066 Likes: 31	Quote But they already glow on their own. [Devil] <<just joking>> Michael Join us on the #loisclark Discord server! We talk about fanfic, our favorite show, life, and more! (It’s almost like the IRC days of old again!) I go by Michael on the Archives.

Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (37/??) #89351 09/08/12 07:26 PM
Joined: Apr 2011 Posts: 9,509 USA VirginiaR OP Nobel Peace Prize Winner
OP VirginiaR Nobel Peace Prize Winner Joined: Apr 2011 Posts: 9,509 USA	Quote Don’t worry, you can all find them 600 feet down at the bottom. They just need some gluing back together. Like Lex. Clones? No, no, no. I like fresh unique Readers... OTOH, I'm not picky. Quote ER2EW: She’s really stubborn about her timeline isn’t she? Just like with Pulitzer first, then baby. This isn't a timeline playing story. This story is timeline sticky for a reason. Quote This reminds me… Part 40 just posted. VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.

Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (37/??) #89352 09/08/12 09:11 PM
Joined: Apr 2007 Posts: 9,066 Likes: 31 Darth Michael Boards Chief Administrator Nobel Peace Prize Winner
Darth Michael Boards Chief Administrator Nobel Peace Prize Winner Joined: Apr 2007 Posts: 9,066 Likes: 31	Quote Clones? No, no, no. I like fresh unique Readers... OTOH, I'm not picky. Michael Join us on the #loisclark Discord server! We talk about fanfic, our favorite show, life, and more! (It’s almost like the IRC days of old again!) I go by Michael on the Archives.

Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (37/??) #89353 03/08/13 04:45 PM
Joined: Aug 2012 Posts: 2,549 Detroit, Michigan J John Lambert Pulitzer
John Lambert Pulitzer J Joined: Aug 2012 Posts: 2,549 Detroit, Michigan	Quote She liked that he stood up to her? Lana had hated it when he done that. Clark smiled. “Who says I don’t? Back home, I practically had to fight the women off with a stick,” he said. Sadly, this fact was true. I think that should be "when he'd done". You could also go "when he had done", but that would probably be a little out of line with your general style, and anyway the first way makes the mistake a lot less. I also from re-reading realized that Clark told Lois he was from another dimension just after telling her about Smallville. So technically he did tell her it was a different Kansas, she just seems to not have picked up on it then. Quote “About what? I’ve written all we can. Henderson told me some those details off the record because it’s sealed due to an Internal Investigation,” he explained. I think that should be "some of those". Quote Clark smiled. Look at that, jealousy did work. He chose not to press his luck and tell her what great friend Cat Grant really was. That wasn’t a battle he wanted to fight any time in the future. I think that should be "what a great". John Pack Lambert

Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (37/??) #89354 03/08/13 05:12 PM
Joined: Aug 2012 Posts: 2,549 Detroit, Michigan J John Lambert Pulitzer
John Lambert Pulitzer J Joined: Aug 2012 Posts: 2,549 Detroit, Michigan	Quote Lex waved that idea off that idea with a flip of his hand. “Let’s hold off on that for now. What news do you have for me on Mr. Kent?” I think you have one too many "that ideas" there. Quote We do know he checked into the Apollo Hotel on May 14th when we assume he arrived into Metropolis. I sort of thing it should be "arrived in Metropolis". The current way might be workable, but it sounds awkward. Quote “We haven’t yet have been able to establish any activity in Metropolis prior to the fourteenth, but we’re still looking into it. I think the "have" is unnedded there. John Pack Lambert

Re: FDK - Wrong Clark (37/??) #89355 03/08/13 06:00 PM
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OP VirginiaR Nobel Peace Prize Winner Joined: Apr 2011 Posts: 9,509 USA	Quote Originally posted by John Lambert: I think that should be "when he'd done". You could also go "when he had done", but that would probably be a little out of line with your general style, and anyway the first way makes the mistake a lot less. Oh, fine, we'll stick with my usual style. Thanks. Quote I also from re-reading realized that Clark told Lois he was from another dimension just after telling her about Smallville. So technically he did tell her it was a different Kansas, she just seems to not have picked up on it then. Um... he told her he was Smallville, Kansas, not a "different Kansas". Quote I think that should be "some of those". Right again! Fixed. Quote I think that should be "what a great". Only by those who prefer correct grammar. All better now. Thanks. Quote I think you have one too many "that ideas" there. Perhaps, I did, but not anymore! Say bye-bye to those extra ideas, Lexy! Thanks. Quote I sort of thing it should be "arrived in Metropolis". The current way might be workable, but it sounds awkward. Oh, that whole sentence was a mess. VirginiaR. "On the long road, take small steps." -- Jor-el, "The Foundling" --- "clearly there is a lack of understanding between those two... he speaks Lunkheadanian and she Stubbornanian" -- chelo.

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