Lois & Clark Forums Forums Fan Fiction Lois & Clark Fanfic FDK: Clark and Lois - Hope Realized - Matchmaker Chronicle Volume 5 18/25

comments go here

I don't see any posting to make my comments on. Part 18 seems to be missing.

That was really odd. I was able to get to it by using the link in the TOC.

None the less I have reposted it.

You misspelled the restaurant name once, putting two t's at the start.

I was thinking they should tell Sam Lane about alternate universese, so they can introduce Sam Lane to Ellen Lane in Lois' home universe.

No I am wondering who the "he" that Lucy was thinking of is. My current guess is that it was James Olsen.

I am still shocked that Mayson agreed to this plan. I guess Scardino has decided to stop acting like a cad around Lois.

I am surprsied that neither Lucy nor anyone else has pointed out the major problem in the story as Clark and Lois told it. If he found Lois a few months ago, that means he found her when he was very actively dating Mayson. I am surprised no one has expressed any discomfort with the speed Clark went from Mayson to Lois.

Hi John,

Thanks for the heads up on the misspelling. It has been corrected.

They haven't given the story to anyone that would care except possibly Mayson, but she would understand because she knows about the time traveling.

Well they gave the story to Lucy, but maybe she has not followed the tabloids enough to notice that inconsistency.

You posted it twice on the dark side, Ken, which I guess you've notice by now.

Yes, I believe Lucy was dating James Olsen, engaged to him actually, before Lois disappeared. She's in for the shock of her life if she discovers her new boss is her former beau.

That's sad about Ellen but not wholey unexpected. Is this the first we've heard about Lois's backstory? I don't remember it coming up before that *her* mom wasn't an alcoholic and her father had died in Vietnam. It's interesting that Sam's death doesn't make Ellen go off the deep end as much as his cheating does.

I agree with John. Someone is going to figure out that Clark was dating Mayson at the same time he was also supposedly wooing or married to Lois. Trust me, that's the stuff people like Goode and Nunk live for. They better work out a better cover story than the one they've been using. They worry about people finding out about Lucy being Superman's sister-in-law, but they don't think the tabloids will compares the dates?

Even Scardino sees that Clark has done a number on Mayson. It makes sense that he feel overprotective of her. I'm a little confused on why they're doing this prostition sting again, and/or why Scardino's involved. He's not DEA in this dimension but FBI, right? Can you refresh my memory (beside getting Mayson a new beau) why they're doing this (or the part number in which the case is discussed)? Thanks.

I think you need to clarify Lois's undercover name before that first scene on the street. Because all of a sudden you're referring to Lois as "Lolo" without ever explaining why. At first I thought it was a typo. I also don't see the point in refering to her undercover name in the prose, as us readers know her as Lois. Dialogue, yes; prose, no. <<also you have "turn" twice in that one sentance>>

I wonder if Lois is going to bump into her old beau Stokes dressed in that outfit.

What will Lucy and Sam think when they discover that Lois is super powered?