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/me faints... Wow... what a night <g>. On August 19, Pel sent the first draft to me, and here we are, almost four months later... but I have to admit that it was well worth the wait   ]
Death: Easy, Bill. You'll give yourself a heart attack and ruin my vacation.
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Well... there was some gorgeous writing in there -- especially the para that Sara quoted. You darned near broke my heart. But it stopped too soon! Come back and give me my happy ending, darn it! <pout>
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This is so good, so very, very good.
And sad, so very, very sad.
And it's how many parts before you give Pam her happy ending?!
I'd like a bit of that,too, I have to say.
Lyrical, Pel. You're a wordsmith.
CC
You mean we're supposed to have lives?
Oh crap!
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Very nice and oh so achingly sad.
Looking forward to reading more Pel. You write beautifully.
~Liz
Lois: Can I go?
Clark: No.
Lois: Oh come on, Clark, why do we go through this? We both know I’m going to go.
Clark: Then why do you ask?
Lois: I’m trying to be nice.
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Hi, Wow! Great start. MAF 
Maria D. Ferdez.
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Don't like Luthor, unfinished, untitled and crossover story, and people that promises and don't deliver. I'm getting choosy with age.
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Oh yay! Pel posted the first part!
It's so hauntingly, lyrically beautiful. And so incredibly realistic.
I'm going to need a lot of tissues for this . . .
Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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I am speachless. It's absolutely beautiful. You are such a multi-talented bird  . Your trailers are amazing, and your writing is absolutely lyrical. My heart totally went out to Lois. Her parents really messed her up  . Hurry up with the next part! - Laura 
Laura "The Yellow Dart" U. (Alicia U. on the archive)
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"Meg...who let you back in the house?" -Family Guy
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P.S. Sara... how do I get to Tipperary?
"Practice up your shielding spells...and remember to duck if you see green light coming your way." Harry Potter to Wizengamot in OotP trial A Bad Week in the Wizengamot
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Ahm... I guess it's just a piece of fluff I started writing some time ago. Well, I have nothing against fluff. In fact, I absolutely *adore* fluff...but from what I see here, this isn't fluff. Nothing that so poignantly describes the hurt and devastation that young Lois is feeling on this cold December day can possibly be called fluff.  As others have said, your prose is beautiful. I want to read more. Now. Any time. Yesterday wouldn't be soon enough. ::stamping foot impatiently:: Where is Pam's happy ending? Kathy
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Fluff! No way, this is way to hear wrenching to be fluff. Laura
Clark: “If we can be born in an instant, and die in an instant, why can’t we fall in love in an instant?”
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Pel WOW! WOW!  I can't wait to read the next part. Please post it ASAP!  Tricia 
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Pel, you already know how blown away I am by this, and as I'm pretty short of time right now you'll just have to go and read my BR comments all over again.  I can't believe how long it's taken to persuade you to post this, but now that you have don't keep us waiting too long for the second part!! Wendy
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Pel, this is an amazing start! It calls out angst everywhere. So you see, like I already told you, I'm going to love every part of this. So please hurry with posting. What is your schedule anyway? Saskia (still liking the 'innocent eyes' comment )
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Pel,
beautifully written and very sad
ditto others
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Do you know the most surprising thing about divorce? It doesn't actually kill you, like a bullet to the heart or a head-on car wreck. It should. When someone you've promised to cherish till death do you part says, "I never loved you," it should kill you instantly.
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Hi, Where are you Pelican? What happen with this story? MAF 
Maria D. Ferdez.
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I'm sure Pelican would be very pleased to see that you guys are asking for Part Two, but unfortunately she doesn't appear to be online at the moment and has to deal with some rather serious issues in her RL. I assure you, Part Two is well worth waiting for, and I'm sure that she'll have it out to you guys just as fast as she can.
Sara.
Death: Easy, Bill. You'll give yourself a heart attack and ruin my vacation.
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