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Comments. Thoughts. This fic is a little different.

I think you want to say "Lois' wedding gown" or "Lois's wedding gown". I have to admit I have never figured out which form is correct, but you want to make it possessive.

Interesting that Lucy is there. I don't remember them even addressing Lucy not being there in canon. Of course she just vanished starting with "I'm Looking Through You", so I guess her not being there for the wedding being explained would have also created problems.

I loved the story. Hmm, so how did Clark escape Lex's trap? Was he just too smart to go and talk to Lex as SM, and did he decide to not give Lex even that much control over him.

Why he actually went and spoke with Lex never really made sense. This makes a lot more sense, and is much more satisfying than canon. Of course, I can see why they did things the way they did. It would have almost been to clean a closure for the season to get another one. Also, it would have deprived them of the triangle-built-for-two aspect of the show much quicker. OK, technically Lois does not know CK=SM yet, but I can't see him keeping her in the dark on that much longer.

Although, even if he does, the love-triangle-of-two dies when Lois tells Clark unequivocably "I love you". The key to its life is Clark thinking Lois only really loves SM.

A much more satisfying ending to House of Luthor. Sweet and romantic. Love it all!

It was addressed in the script but it didn't make the final version. I believe it was to save time. From the script:

LOIS: My dad's medical relief mission is in Africa, and Lucy's still trekking in Nepal.

See? He should always let her speak first.

Awwwwww.... /me melts.

Nothing could be better than a happy, WAFFy ending. Great rewriting!

Andreia

I love it! It's a great, satisfying ending to House of Luthor.

Lois Lane as a "prize." I don't think that would suit her too well, but it's definitely the sort of attitude Lex would have.

Excellent. I loved the descriptions of Clark coming into the room as a warrior king to claim his woman. Ooooo, yeah. Can he stride into my room like that please?

Oooh, I love this story! It makes me feel all warm and cozy. This is a much more satisfying ending to HoL.

Oh, yes, Lex's monstrosity of a wedding would be highly orchestrated and timed. I just wanted to slap that wedding planner for telling Lois that she had 10 minutes. Truth is, the bride should ALWAYS be allowed to arrive whenever she feels like it. If you time-pressure some brides to death, they are less likely to arrive at all.

When Clark knocks on Lois's door, I thought it was her mother as per canon. This makes more sense. Of course, he would knock on her door. He just heard her say "Lois Lane-Kent". Nothing would stop him from being at that door. Although, it appears that Clark didn't even hear her.

My one qualm is with this line:
Even when faced with the reality of the situation, I can never see Lex admitting defeat. NEVER.

for Perry getting a punch of Lex in! No one deserved it more.

This was beautifully done and one of my favorite of your vignettes.

Neither of these excuses make sense with what they did with the characters in S2-S4. If they had left these lines in, I wonder how different Lucy's and Sam's characterizations would have changed?

This just made me chuckle. I needed a dose of romance and this story hit the spot.

There were a few than/then mixups that I noticed throughout.

Glad to see you posted this.
The expanded ending works much better.

Very nice.
Bob

Sorry everyone! Been out of town with limited computer access. Now's the time for making comments and answering!

John

I think you want to say "Lois' wedding gown" or "Lois's wedding gown". I have to admit I have never figured out which form is correct, but you want to make it possessive.

That will be addressed in the archive version.

Thank you! That makes me feel very happy! Yeah, I always thought visiting Lex as Superman was a huge mistake. I'm so glad you liked the story!

Ultra Woman

I wanted this to be almost like a fairytale! Romance was in the air, but not between the Bride and the Groom! The man who truly loved her came at the right time. Thanks again for reading this fic when it was in its original state!

Annie B

He considered her a shiny possession or 'prize', just the sort of thing the Third Richest Man in the world would say.

Katherine Kent
Yeah, that was one of my favorite lines. As for him striding into your room like that? You are on your own! (Snicker)

Mrs Mxyzptlk

Your fellow commenters agree! I never could understand why Clark chose to answer Lex's summons. It was a definite invitation to disaster! I am sure nightmares about that green cage haunted Clark for the rest of his life. Nightmares which he probably never told Lois about.

Magical
A dose of romance sometimes is all we need to put a gentle smile on our faces and in our hearts. Thank you for the lovely compliment! It made writing this one-shot fic all the more enjoyable.

Bobbart
It does, doesn't it? Guess what? I am still not satisfied! Don't be surprised if this story returns with a longer and better ending!

The longer the better.

Yeah, going to see Luthor was a pretty stupid move on Clark's part.

Has anyone written a story where Clark deals with PTSD after getting out of the cage? I'd think he'd be at least a bit twitchy after something like that. Claustrophobic, maybe? Afraid of wine cellars? Or maybe cummerbunds or pouring wine or anything that glows green might give him flashbacks? I guess a story like that would be pretty dark, though.

Mrs Mxyzptlk

I have no doubt it would be. What Clark experienced was horrific and for him not to have PTSD afterwards is unreasonable. But I can't remember reading about any story dealing with the topic.

Still think of this, despite Lex putting him in that cage, if Clark had his powers he would have found a way to save Lex. That my friend is true nobility!

Ultra Woman
I am seriously contemplating adding a couple more pages. So tell me gentle readers, should I expand on this story and post on the boards or the archives?

Very sweet! If only Clark had actually done this instead of meeting with Lex... so very perfect!

Morgana,

Thanks for letting me ba a part of this along with your other betas.

Ready to work on the expansion.

It has never taken this long for me to write a comment! RL is the culprit... honest!

VirginiaR

Very true! Lex wanted everything to be showy and over the top, once again relying on appearance rather than substance. Greta Keith was created from that one line in HoL. In everyone's mind Lex had stamped his last name on Lois. No way would he allow her to be Lois Lane either professionally or in private.

Yes, there is nothing more terrifying than a bride who is pressured beyond what she can bear on her wedding day.

Ah, now we don't know that for sure do we? Clark hadn't let her in on the secret ....yet. But yes, in this version of the story is determined to get Lois to change her mind. He needed to be in complete control of himself, like a warrior king about to go into battle.

Bravo! No one else said anything about that particular line! Each character is slightly different from what we are used to expecting:

Lois is a stranger to herself, she is indecisive and afraid, she suspects her fiancé will do more than just be angry if she refuses to go through with this marriage.

Although Ellen Lane is never seen I wanted her to be the way Phyllis Coates portrayed her. Strong and calm, not a woman battling with the bottle.

Clark is not a worrier, but a man who wants to be with the woman he loves, even if it means crashing her wedding.

Perry probably always wanted to punch Lex's lights out, especially after 'Chip' made his appearance in the newsroom!

Finally, Lex does admit defeat in this story, but at the same time sneeringly tells Clark he is not man enough for Lois. Just a little different!

LOIS: My dad's medical relief mission is in Africa, and Lucy's still trekking in Nepal.

Agreed, this line did not fit with how the characters were eventually portrayed. I always wondered why Lucy was treated so poorly by the writers in the show,

Thank you! That means a great deal to me!

Mouserocks

Thanks! As the feedback indicates, HoL had a lot of inconsistencies. After all, Clark should have known Luthor would have some kind of trap waiting for him. So glad to know this one-shot story struck the proper cord.

KenJ

As was written in the outset, you guys are the best! Thanks for all the assistance on this one.

I have some ideas, but two other stories should come first!