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That would make Superman's life VERY difficult - how does he conceal that he and Clark have the same disability?
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Awww. He remembers, kinda, sorta, not really. This is a sweet second chapter to 'Tomorrow Never Comes'. Is Lois a long term memory now? That's a happy thought. I bet he was woken up by the baby. 
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Nicely done! Yes, he probably was awaken by the baby.  Ah, one question. Why are they still in Clark's apartment and not in the townhouse on Hyperion? Just a query....
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Wow! What a powerful and poignant trilogy.
Clark is lucky to have people who are so patient with him and who continue to love him despite his challenges.
Thank you for such a thought-provoking series.
Joy,
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I agree with Lynn-- a great little trilogy of ficlets! I never even considered this aspect (though how permanent amnesia never crossed my mind from a point where he actually had amnesia, I'll never know :rolleyes: ). Great job-- some wonderful stories and I would love to see more!
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Originally posted by Morgana:
Ah, one question. Why are they still in Clark's apartment and not in the townhouse on Hyperion? I'm guessing for Clark's peace of mind. Waking up in a strange house every morning would be quite stressful.
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Wow! Amazing how you pack so much content in such a short story!  Andreia
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Aw, thanks, guys!  Originally posted by VirginiaR: Originally posted by Morgana:
[b]Ah, one question. Why are they still in Clark's apartment and not in the townhouse on Hyperion? Exactly. Plus, there's also the practical issue of remembering where he lives. I'm glad you guys like the series. I had another idea for a fic involving the regular amnesia from the show (retrograde, where as this fic is about anterograde) only permanent, but it just hasn't come together yet.  Maybe someday... But I'm glad y'all liked this one.
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Hmm, I have to say that this was more encouraging than the other ones. At least Clark is starting to remember some.
It was not until the end I figured out what had happened. Lois got up to check on the baby, and Clark noticed she was not there.
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I'm curious about the nature of Clark's condition. Lois has formed an intimate relationship with him, so he must remember some things sometimes. Does he build memories throughout the day, and then revert every time he goes to sleep? It's more subtle than that, I'm sure.
In any case, I really liked the story.
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I'll bet he was pretty shocked all those months when he woke up to find Lois next to him and pregnant.
This really shows how dedicated Lois is to him. He can't really work anymore, so she is supporting him, and every day she has to explain to him what's going on. He already loved her enough that she was able to convince him in a day that they should get married that day, but the next day he wouldn't even remember that she loves him. I imagine they'd need to send the baby to daycare or have Martha and Johnathan move nearby to babysit since Clark wouldn't be able to learn how to take care of his baby. He'd constantly be a brand new parent.
In some ways this is a very hopeful story, with Lois being there for him and his retaining some small bit of new memories, but it also leaves me rather melancholy.
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This is a great story in a great trilogy.
Once again, I'm amazed and awed at how well you can write a story in such few words. You cut right down to the pith of the story and excise all the unimportant bits. Well done.
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Hi Queenie! This story sort of slots in between Tomorrow Never Comes and The Sound of Time Passing, Oooh! Those are old ones! Am sure I’ve read them on the Archives! He sat up, wincing as the springs of the mattress creaked beneath him and hoping that he didn't wake Lois. Huh, what now? —wait. Lois? Why on earth...? He turned and looked down at the empty space beside him on the bed, running a hand over it for good measure. Lois wasn't there. So, dreaming? “Lois?”
The room remained still and quiet, cementing his feelings of foolishness. Then, after a moment, he heard a soft voice answer, “Clark?”  Lois reached down and took his hand in both of hers. “Clark,” she said softly, “It's 1999. You stopped Nightfall a little over five years ago.” Oops? “What?!” He opened his mouth, closed it, then shook his head. “I think I'd remember...” he trailed off, frowning in confusion at the woman who, logically, should be across town trying to call her family members for a final farewell chat. “...wouldn't I?” Knocked his head on a rock? Clark only heard the soft sounds of a baby burbling contentedly. “Get some sleep,” she said, smiling at him. “I'll tell you in the morning.”  Michael
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