Wow, okay. What do I say to this? This has been some of the best FDK I've ever gotten. Thanks!
Rivka, I'm glad you forgive me. Good to hear.
Thanks for the compliment about the seeds. Oh, and based on your comments, I've made a slight alteration in the text to clarify things. It now reads:
There was a note that said "Superman" in large letters, and, next to it, a dark bottle labeled "pomegranate seeds." Curious, he checked with his x-ray vision. The seeds had been cleaned out. In their place were five pills. He picked up the note.
As for the "greek chorus"... I hadn't thought of it that way, but I like it! ... Uhm, that is... Of course I meant it that way! Brilliant of me, wasn't it?
Not so sure about that dent in the wall of Logic's favored corner. I think, in Lois's head, Logic tends to spend more time practicing the hurdles...
Jose, thanks for posting!
Vicki, wow, thanks! (Must... resereve... smilies...)
I love that Indignation, Curiosity, and Determination have joined together so often that they now work "in practiced unison"
Hey, who do you think is in charge during most investigations? <g> actually, come to think, i might just change the phrasing there..
Indignation, abandoning its previous companions, joined Curiosity and Determination. The three worked in practiced unison to set up the impenetrable fortress which others had named "Mad Dog Lane."
On a final note, the revelation scene was wonderfully written. It has been added to my mental list of all-time favorite revelations.
Wow! That is saying something! Thanks!
Liz, thanks for posting! (I'm going to be saying that a lot, aren't I?)
Great finish and I have to say that I tend to love those straight forward revelations. They really satisfy me!
Yeah, me too. That's why I try to write them. Glad to hear I'm not alone.
Joy, glad you liked it so much. Thanks!
(Starting to rush now, because Mom's getting impatient... Sorry.)
Maria, thank you!
Nan, I'll try.
Don't know what the muse will come up with next. As you can see, though, I haven't forgotten the poll story. Now please excuse me while I savor the bit where
you told me one of my stories was "well thought out"...
Wendy, thank you!! Sorry you were so tired, but I'm glad you took the time to post. Wow, directly to the Kerth file! That's... wow.
(Okay, rushing through this isn't fair to anyone. I'm going to head out now. Be back to edit this post and respond to the ficlist letters later.)
(I'm back. <Begin babble mode.> I just wanted to make it clear that I did not pay any less attention to the replies above or skip saying anything I would otherwise have said. I simply tried to tell myself to read and write faster, which didn't really work very well. Mostly, I sat there replying as usual and feeling guilty for it because Mom was waiting impatiently downstairs. The whole problem started because I hadn't been sleeping well in the past few days, so I woke up even later than usual today. That just threw everything off. Anyway, I'm back, I really appreciate all this wonderful FDK, and I'll be sending this story in to the archive shortly. <End babble.> We now return you to your regularly scheduled FDK response.)
Speaking of babble, glad you enjoyed Lois's, Laurie.
That's another one of those things that wasn't in the original draft. Bethy suggested that I put some babble into the note (though she had a different idea of where to put it), and it seemed like a fun idea, so I put it in (at the same time incorperating her suggestion that I give the readers a bit more information about why Lois happened to have a bottle of pomegranate seeds in the back of her cupboard and why she wasn't afraid that someone would try to eat them or throw them out). So, again, thanks to Bethy for making the story better than it was.
In any case, I'm glad you enjoyed it, Laurie.
Julia, thanks for posting. I'm glad you enjoyed the ending, too.
Tank said:
Very ingenious solution. I'm impressed.
Thank you! That's very gratifying to hear, especially considering that you've come up with some pretty impressive stuff, yourself.
lol on your comments about the writers.
As for the revelation, I've always preferred that type. I've written a couple like that before. I didn't realize there was a trend. Hey, maybe I managed to start it!
I just don't like things to be too drawn out. Sure, there's a lot of confusion and some hurt from the lies (which were hurting Clark, too, btw), but the bottom line is that they love each other and now there's no one in the way of that. As an added bonus, Lois gets Superman along with Clark. I don't think Lois should be extatic (though I did write one like that once, just to be silly), but I never thought it was cause for days of anger and rejection, either. Something in the middle is good, like we saw in TF. She was angry, but she got over it (in a few hours or slightly over a century, depending on how you look at it...).
Anyway, I'll just step off my little soapbox and take a look at what Julie had to say...
Aww.... Paul, that was so beautiful.
Thanks!
The revelation soliloquy/monologue was really touching...
I'm glad you liked it. There was some worry, especially in the first draft, that it would seem boring. Most of it is information the readers already know, even if Lois doesn't. I'd hoped that breaking it up with some introspection would help. I'm glad it worked for you.
Glad you enjoyed the rest, too.
As for the proposal... what else should she have said? It always seemed silly to me that Clark did that in the ep. Actually, I heard that the writers only made him do that because they were having trouble getting the higher-ups to let them move things forward. In any case, it was the wrong time for him to propose, and I think this was a much gentler way to let him know that. That's the way I see things, anyway. (Ha ha! I can ramble better than you can. :p )
Jen, thanks. I'm sorry I made you late for class, but I'm glad you thought it was worth it. <g>
Lauren, thank you! I just can't get enough of comments like yours. I'm glad I made up for that evil teaser, too.
Barb, glad you enjoyed. Thanks for posting. Glad, too, that I didn't interfere with your WIP. We all do tend to go in different directions, don't we? Makes for some pretty cool reads. Good luck with your story.
Merry, thanks for posting. Good luck catching up with everything else. Good to see you around again.
Looks like that's it. Thanks again, everyone!
Paul
). So I'll just tell you that I have just added this story to my Kerth 2005 list, in at least two categories to be going along with. 
