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Back after being away for a good little bit of time.


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I don't think I told you yet how much I admire the work you put into crafting this tale with such detail and vivid description. I enjoyed the fight scene and the conflicts shown in there. Clark's life on New Krypton is so much richer here, down to a midnight snack with his servant.

I feel like I'm learning more English words every time I dive into this world. It's very well written, so thank you.


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Thanks Bakasi!

I had a great amount of help writing this story. Many of those persons are no longer around, but I learned much about writing from all of them. As I mentioned in the First chapter the late Kenard Janney was the mastermind behind all the fight sequences, computer tech and medicine. My work is all the poorer because he is no longer here. When it comes to food and cooking I tackle that territory. The midnight snack idea was suggested by my husband Ted. Thanks babe!

Forever grateful to the writers on the show for giving us the concept of New Krypton. Here is a full-sized version of Kryptonian culture (Sorry Kandor!) that we, the writers of fanfiction can play in to our heart's content. The Guardians are not my creation, but I grabbed it and ran with the concept. Tre-Vil was an addition to the mix. More from him in later chapters. thumbsup


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All the original characters are interesting and add a lot of depth and intricacy to the story. You truly are doing an amazing job of bringing this story to life.

The fight scene was intense. Arc-Tal is a bully and I was hoping for a different conclusion. Clark unknowingly made Ching look bad. He still has a lot to learn. I have a feeling that Arc-Tal is now even more empowered and will continue to cause problems.

I like Devers. He’s good for Clark.

Thank you for this terrific chapter! I love this story!

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Within these walls, the Sapphire Guardians proved that they truly understood the
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meaning of discipline and physical prowess.
It's cool that NK has a sect of service members like this!

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Master Tre-Vil, direct descendant of Ret-Vil, the founder of the Sapphire Guard and something of a father figure to Ching, bowed in greeting.
I love seeing a character that's got a direct positive relationship with Ching, since he seems villainized on the show.

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“It does my heart good to see so many recruits have joined the Guard. As such, we could certainly use your talents in their training. Is it possible you could squeeze in some time for a few practice sessions with the more promising candidates?”
This little detail really helps me understand why he was sent to find/work with Clark (moreso than the show even did).

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“He has even asked me if I could arrange a private match between himself and Lady Polara Lo.”
Ching’s eyes grew wide. “He is ambitious!”
I love that the men respect her in this arena!!

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The man was a bully. He took pleasure in terrorizing newcomer Guards of a lesser background.
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Five years after becoming Guardians, they had both been selected in the final round of those competing for the position of personal bodyguard to Lady Zara.
Thank goodness Ching won!

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It was known that Ching stood firmly with the House of El.
I love the political intrigue that's lace in here!

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He sprung towards his opponent, but someone stuck a foot out, tripping him like a first timer.
He should have seen this coming - it feels like exactly the thing that a group of bullies would do. But it's exactly what makes them so awful, because who could expect this sort of thing?

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He was utterly shocked that Arc-Tal was ignoring Tre-Vil’s command.
Same!

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When Dar-Ur raced to tell the leaders of the House of El what was happening, she and Kal-El had raced from their private training session to watch Ching and if necessary, come to his aid.
What a great team to have Ching's back!

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The bandages changed colors as they gradually healed the blade’s entry wound, but the color was still dark to indicate the recent injury.
This is such cool tech!

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As if reading his mind, Ching said, “I don’t need you to correct the situation for me. Just release me from my current duties and reassign me to the Sapphire Guard.”
jawdrop That's such a big deal!

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“True. Your adoptive parents’ kindness and courage are traits that those of the nobility such as Arc-Tal would benefit from emulating. The results are evident … in their son.”
Awwww. I like him more knowing that he likes the Kents.

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“’Fool’ seems the appropriate word to describe someone who thought he could be promoted to be Zara’s guard by wounding you in the leg.”
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“Because someday, should we survive this benighted ‘Splinter War’ you will return to Terra and Lois. The honor of … protecting Lady Zara will go to another. The Council will find someone from a noble house for her to wed, and I will watch from a distance as she rules with an unworthy stranger by her side.”
Aw, I feel so badly for him!

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As he slept, he had twisted and tossed in the sleep silks, drenching them with sweat, finally crying out frantically, “Lois, be careful!”
Poor Clark.

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But I can say with confidence that the people of New Krypton in general hold you in high esteem.
Awwwww. Dever, what a good guy.

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With a twinkle in his eye, Kal-El said, “All right, but only if you’ll share this light midnight snack with me.”
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Shaking his head in sadness, Dever said, “Nothing good seems to come out of the Dakor Province.”
“What makes you say that?”
Oooo! This is so cute - and such a great way for Clark to get the gossip.

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“So the Convoca speaker likes playing against the middle. That’s something I have to remember for the future.”
Super useful of Dever to bring this up.

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Since I was a young man!
It's really sweet that he has affection fro the family.

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He needed to record something for the courier.
Yay!

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Thank you so much for commenting!

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All the original characters are interesting and add a lot of depth and intricacy to the story. You truly are doing an amazing job of bringing this story to life.

The fight scene was intense. Arc-Tal is a bully and I was hoping for a different conclusion. Clark unknowingly made Ching look bad. He still has a lot to learn. I have a feeling that Arc-Tal is now even more empowered and will continue to cause problems.

I like Devers. He’s good for Clark.

It makes sense that there would be so many original characters. Clark is among his parents' people, he is also learning a new culture first hand and not from books. His grandmother, Lady Lo, as well as all the other family members are teaching him a great deal about being a Kryptonian.

Thank you for noticing the sword fight scene. It was intense! The late Ken Janney wrote it for me four years ago and its wonderful that readers are taking notice of it. Arc-Tal is a bully and we have not seen the last of him unfortunately. Yes, Clark did make Ching look bad and it was not his plan to do so. He is learning his way.

Devers is a kind-hearted man. Whenever I think of him, Uncle Mike comes to mind.


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A writer's job is to think of new plots and create characters who stay with you long after the final page has been read. If that mission is accomplished than we have done what we set out to do, which is to entertain and hopefully educate.

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