Re: FDK: The Courier - Chapter Seven New Krypton
JadedEvie
12/03/24 03:13 PM
He had so many questions to ask the enigmatic head of El House and was intrigued to finally have a chance to sit down with his father’s brother. This is such a close connection to his dad! As they drew closer, the resemblance of Abondar-El to a Tuscan villa became stronger. The Tuscan element is such a great aesthetic held against the red city you've described. The sight of a garden filled with vegetables and flowers caused Clark to relax. This is a great touch, this reminder of Smallville. At Green Station #3 checking on a particular Kryptonian vegetable that she, Dar-Ur and a team of cultivators are coaxing from our old world samples to adapt to this planet’s soil. This is another great touch that his family also has an agricultural background. His aunt explained that with the change of light, the paintings shifted colors depicting different times of the day. So cool! It's nice, too, that the appreciation of the pastoral continues inside the house. Meeting his Uncle Zor-El for the first time was like staring into a prism showing fragments of the past, present and unglimpsed future. This is such great phrasing. With a start he suddenly realized that this was the first time he could ask a living Kryptonian such a question. That's such a poignant moment! Zor-El answered with a smile very much like Clark’s own. This is sweet, too. It would be such an amazing moment for Clark to see his family connection. His uncle reminded him of Perry White, Jonathan Kent and in some ways due to Zor-El’s vast scientific knowledge and all-consuming curiosity, Dr. Bernie Klein. This is such an incredible combination! “The life of Clark Kent and his beautiful fiancée, Lois Lane would continue without interference from me. There's something really caring and powerful about him using Lois' name here. "I was training Kara to take my place and make no mistake; she is perfectly capable of accepting the challenge and would govern this planet with compassion tempered by knowledge. I was making certain that key men would accept her as the first woman ruler of New Krypton.” Yay! I love this plan!  Thinking of Lex Luthor, Clark said bitterly, “We have many people like that on Earth as well.” Such a great allusion here, to liken Nor to Lex. “Sadly, whenever there is great change, resistance rears its head, some of it was with good reason, while others not so much. Members of the nobility did not like the fact that women and those of lesser ranks were gaining a greater say in government. They wanted to go back to the old ways.” This is so topical now. It's sad that something we consider so outmoded when we read a story is becoming a prevalent attitude in the real world. Nor is a throwback to the days when our world was run by warlords and everyone else existed only by their pleasure. This is so aptly put! Only a blind man could ignore the fact that Zor-El was dying. So sad that he found Zor-El now, only to be losing him again!
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Re: Good Night, Lois - The Lost Girl
JadedEvie
12/03/24 05:57 AM
I'd MEANT to imply that Lois' loneliness felt indigenous to her character, thanks to bakasi's very poignant writing and effective set-up here. ...but if it'd get me a chocolate bar, I'd throw a fit and stomp my foot, too!  
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Re: Good Night, Lois - The Lost Girl
Darth Michael
12/03/24 05:51 AM
Story: She’s only five and all alone.
Evie: ...which isn't so different than all the rest of the time, either. Season one Lois: did the reader just imply that I behave like a five year old? I do *not* throw tamper tantrums! /Stomps foot/ Perry: Chocolate, Lois? Lois: Gimme!  Michael
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Re: Good Night, Lois - A Thimble For A Kiss
JadedEvie
12/03/24 04:07 AM
I can't believe it's been almost three years already since I first met her. Oh, cool! Time jump! Three years since Dr. Lane offered me a job at his hospital. Excellent! I know. I've seen the reason with my own eyes. Long, shapely legs, a slender frame and a very enticing cleavage. Oh. Yuck. Sad that Clark couldn't prevent this, too, somehow, but I guess we can't really change people. It's a good thing I have super reflexes. OMG, she's probably tested this to see what she can get away with!  “Well, he's busy with his studies,” Lois' father says tersely. Theeeeeere's the Sam Lane that Lois always described. I’m only too happy to get out of this hostile atmosphere, away from her parents who – as far as feeling loved goes – are more absent than mine. Love this description, and it's been totally backed up in the other chapters, which is so satisfying. “It seems to me that you pay more interest in this boy than in your own daughters.” Oh... This is very clever to make Clark the son he always wanted. “They’re fighting again, aren’t they?” Lois’ soft voice pulls me back to my immediate surroundings. Love how well the 8-year old can read him. Does she know about all of his powers? Seems like she takes the super-hearing in stride. She shakes her head and her lower lip quivers. “I just don’t think they love each other any more.” Yikes, she IS precocious! Kids understand so much, though, and usually more than they get credit for. “I mean, Peter promised Wendy a good time in Neverland, but then she had to do all the work and take care of the Lost Boys and when she got homesick, he was angry because he wanted to keep her all for himself. And they fought.” ...and that's like 80% of the divorces in America... no, no, just kidding (mostly), but yikes, that story is really applicable over a wide span of things, isn't it? Such a great insert here, because this could totally just as easily be her parents' story. In a way, she is as much my Wendy as I am her Peter. But the analogy only goes so far. This whole set-up is so sad. the silver thimble in her hand OMG!  "What do you think? A kiss, of course. It’s for you, at least until I’m old enough for you to give me a real one.” Alright, well, fascinating to see what page she's on! These are so cute! Looking forward to where this goes in the next one!
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Re: Good Night, Lois - The Lost Girl
JadedEvie
12/03/24 03:53 AM
This will be a perfect waste of money given that I can fly. What a perfect start! I promised myself to live a little now that I no longer need to hide from the authorities. But the money would be better spent on my education. Besides, standing here, I think I miss my parents more than ever.
But it's just a couple of dollars to make a dream come true. I don't know what the saddest part of this is, but its like one punch after another. She’s only five and all alone. ...which isn't so different than all the rest of the time, either.  “Clark!” She rubs her nose on her sleeve and wraps her arms around me. “I lost my parents.” He said he'd come back when she really needed him. This is a really unexpected and cute way to make that come to fruition. If I'm not careful, I’m going to lose myself in the cacophony of an entire city. ....such good training, though, in case he wants to start moonlighting in tights. “You’re not alone, Lois,” I say softly. “I’m not going to leave your side until we’ve found your parents.” He may not be wearing the mantle, but its lovely to see him cast in the rescuer's role anyway for Lois. It almost seems like they’re more preoccupied with their fight than with actually finding her in the crowd. This is so spot on. I hate this type of parents. Suddenly I feel like I’m back on the street, watching the tragedy unfold as an intoxicated driver didn't see my parents coming when he turned onto the street. Oh nooo! “First you found her in the park and then you saved her from getting overrun by a car.” Fantastic that this is the version Sam saw! Am I even supposed to be all right after the stunt I just pulled? He's so, so lost, poor thing. Even with the age difference, it's moments like this that make me realize that he's still a kid himself. I take in a sharp breath and look at her parents. Will they realize that Lois and I know each other a lot better than they think? I love the implications of this, because it feels like Lois and Clark's baggage will be switched. He's the one that will have grown up distrusting, hunted, abandoned, etc., but he'll be there for her to give her a loving childhood. So interesting. “Of course you must come! A dinner at our home is the least we can do to thank you for saving our daughter’s life.” Her father pulls out a business card. “Wait a moment, I’ll give you our address. How about next Saturday?” This is genius. Great little twist that I didn't see coming. I'm really looking forward to more of these!
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Re: Good Night, Lois - Fairy Dust
JadedEvie
12/03/24 03:38 AM
I'm not really the ‘Lost Boy’ she believes I am. This is so bittersweet, because I think she sees him better than he sees himself. Gripping my boxes tighter, I try not to think about how much easier it'd be if I carried the monstrosity alone. Love this action here, to mirror his mindset, since it feels like he's keeping a grip on a lot of things. For the first time in years I can be myself around someone, even if she's just a little girl. Seeing Lois each night, even if it's just from above,even if I don't talk to her, gives me a sense of belonging that I haven't felt in a long time, if ever. This is so heartbreaking. But I can't make her the reason to keep going. That's too much responsibility on the shoulders of a little girl. Also so sad. My birth parents sent me here to survive, but there has to be more to life than just making it to the next day. His yearning for a greater purpose here is so poignant. It's not healthy to confuse my brief acquaintance with Lois for friendship. I'm so interested in where you're taking this, since we know that they're cosmically linked, regardless of how Clark is (perhaps appropriately) fighting it. A frown appears on Lois’ forehead. “But I told Mommy and she said it was okay.” Naturally. Then she pauses and I can see realization dawn on her face. “Oh!” This is such a great little moment. “And you don't really know me, either.” Though better than anyone else, I suppose. His isolation is so crushing. “Do you need fairy dust to fly?” What a perfectly sweet end to this one! I'm really enjoying this series! It's hard not to be charmed by it!
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Re: FDK: Advent Calendar for FoLCs (all parts and spoiler warnings)
Darth Michael
12/02/24 09:19 PM
Hi Kathryn! December 2nd Clark might be faster than a speeding bullet, but you’re a little too fast with today’s door. Patience, fellow FoLC! Okay, are you just pulling a Yoda or are you trying to exasperate Lois. The next morning, Lois awoke to find Clark still lying beside her. Oh, it’s a serialized experience in the telling of tales! “Good morning,” he murmured, his voice rich and warm. He pulled her close, wrapping her in the kind of embrace that made her feel like nothing else in the world mattered.
Lois smiled against his chest, her thoughts drifting back to the previous evening. Clark’s advent idea had been just what she needed. Yes, they have advent calendars with all kinds of themes these days. This morning, though, she was grateful for the simple gift of waking up with him still by her side. Awww, he did not turn into a pumkin again Later - after lingering far longer than they should have in the warmth of each other’s arms - they scrambled to get ready for work. Let’s hope they did not need to take a shower after -- Together, that is – or they’d end up being even later. Lois eyed the spider skeptically but allowed herself to be intrigued. “You’ve got my attention. What’s the deal with the creepy-crawly?” Clark grinned as he started with his own bowl. “You married me for my cooking skills, obviously.” Yes, she married him because he keeps her alive. “Though I seem to recall you advertising other talents - flying, lifting heavy things, cleaning the house at superspeed...” Not doing *other* things at superspeed. “True,” Clark replied, his grin widening. “But most of those don’t really help in the kitchen.” The fridge is heavy and the kitchen was a mess last night. After work, I thought we could do something inspired by today’s story.”
Lois raised an eyebrow. “Let me guess - spinning webs?” *During* work they could investigate some old, abandoned buildings, the attics are said to be full of spider webs. Lois lingered by the Christmas tree, her eyes on the spider web decorations now draped across the branches. They shimmered in the soft light.
“You know,” she said quietly, “there’s something comforting about this story. It’s like… no matter how hopeless things feel, there’s always a chance for something beautiful to surprise you.” Awwww Together, they stood in the glow of the tree, the spiderwebs shimmering like spun gold. And for the first time, Lois felt the stirrings of a quieter, simpler kind of Christmas magic, one that reminded her of the joy found in unexpected places. Beautifully woven tale tonight And just the right bit of melancholy  Michael
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Re: FDK: The Courier Chapter Eleven - Earth
Songbird
12/02/24 09:06 PM
It’s good Bernie tipped off Lois that the drone is being tracked. With everything else that’s happening, they definitely don’t need anyone figuring out that Clark is Superman! It would be great if there could be a medical knowledge exchange between Bernie and Cle-Le. It could be beneficial to both parties.
I love this story! Thank you!
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Re: FDK: The Courier Chapter Six - Earth
JadedEvie
12/02/24 07:46 PM
“Mr. White, why is this reporter from the Washington Chronicle in your office?” 'Mr. White!' This is 4-alarm fire angry Lois! “Ah… you two know each other?” Mr. Stern asked his deep rumbling voice tinged with concern. I really love getting to see Franklin Stern here. We don't see him nearly enough in fic! Perry groaned. “Great shades of Elvis! You’re that Paul?” Aw, I love that she really told Perry about this. “The bureau was contacted by Inspector Henderson for me to be a sort of…bodyguard until the RoxxTen matter has died down.” Oh, yikes. This is sure to go over like a lead balloon. The office atmosphere – which was stacked with tension before - had just increased fivefold. Yikes again! All the men, even Franklin Stern, braced themselves for an explosion. "Otherwise, you’ll have to answer to me … and then her fiancé when he returns.” Perry’s face turned as hard as iron. “Trust me, that’s the last thing on Earth you want." I don't know which is better - that he threatens Paul himself, or threatens him with Clark. "Elvis and Priscilla’s divorce was a walk in the park in comparison!" Always love an Elvis story! “Agreed! Martha is going to be so surprised hearing about my latest domestic skill. See you soon.” This is such a cute addition for her! That particular conference room was where she and Clark had had some of their worst fights and best conversations. It might sound a little odd to anyone else, but the room was special and there was no reason to spoil it with Paul’s presence. Awww. It's nice to see her sentimental. "Believe it or not, coming here to protect you while the FBI and the MPD sort out this case with RoxxTen is my way of trying to right it somehow.” As far as ulterior motives go, that's sort of an empathetic one. “Who is Clark Kent anyway? Your boss Perry White, Mr. Stern, and Jimmy talk about him like he was some sort of hero!” I really love this line because it makes kind, ordinary Clark the hero, even though they don't know how close they are to really nailing it.
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Re: FDK: The Courier - Chapter Ten - Earth
Morgana
12/02/24 06:52 PM
BakasiI love that she's even yelling at his holographic image. It must be so hard on Lois to watch Clark's transformation into a warrior. How will this affect them once Clark can return, assuming that is what will happen eventually? I sure hope it does. Like Aurore, I hate it when they're apart.
Love your story, though. As we have seen in the past, Lois yells/babbles out of frustration. To see the man she loves changing into someone different is scary! She is so far away from him and only has the words sent via the courier to convey all her love and encouragement. Clark is changing into Kal-El, a man who must fight for what he believes in. Nonetheless, at the same time he is holding onto the man who used to bring her coffee every morning. It is a delicate balance, but if anyone can do it, it is Clark Kent.
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Re: FDK: The Courier Chapter Ten - New Krypton
Songbird
12/02/24 06:44 PM
That was an intense, exciting chapter! I hope Dar is okay. Clark does not have an easy task ahead of him. He’s facing an enemy who has no honor and doesn’t care who he hurts. Hopefully Clark can defeat Nor without destroying all of New Krypton and himself in the process. I love this story! Thanks!
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Re: FDK: The Courier - Chapter Ten - Earth
Morgana
12/02/24 06:42 PM
AuroreOh 🥺 I feel so much pain for them; I sometimes wonder if it isn’t even harder to have a holographic message than a letter. The need to touch each other must be unbearable. When I started writing this I never thought about that aspect of the holographs. Seeing Clark change because of his heavy responsibilities is something Lois has to endure, which is not an easy thing for her to do.
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Re: FDK: The Courier - Chapter Ten - Earth
Songbird
12/02/24 06:19 PM
Like Aurore and Bakasi, I also hate when Lois and Clark are apart. I also hope Clark returns to Lois. It has to be hard watching the man you love change and knowing you can’t be there to help him. All Lois can do is support him with her monthly holographic messages.
Thanks for a great chapter! I love this story!
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Re: FDK: The Courier Chapter Eight - Earth
Songbird
12/02/24 04:54 PM
Thanks for another terrific chapter! The stake out conversation between Lois and Paul was interesting. I don’t know if those two could ever be friends again but it seems like they’ve put the past behind them. I love this story!
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