Again, apologies for being tardy with this post. I'm delighted you seem to have enjoyed this segment. You were all having so much fun with the flight through the woods and the nasty smuggling gang, that I'd become worried that the abrupt change of pace into WAFFs would disappoint. See, readers can surprise authors just as much as authors surprise readers. <g>
Okay, first order of business - the dashes/ellipses. Okay, ellipses it is then. <g> Good thing I hadn't changed the master copy yet, right?
And then, I think I'll just cut my losses. As I said earlier, I was fully expecting a 100% thumbs down for the ellipses. So, since the majority either didn't notice them, weren't bothered by them or thought they were effective, I figure that's good enough to be going on with.
Thanks to everyone for their input on this one. And, Paul and Liz, don't apologise! The input on this helped me a lot. I've very much appreciated the honest responses.
I was literally giggling for ages after reading this! Brilliant!
Mere, I was so delighted you noticed that one. I was kind of proud of it <g> as it was almost completely an accident.
I had to add to the paragraph to clear up some point and halfway through doing that my eye caught the paragraph under it and it suddenly struck me that it might be fun to have Lois rant on about macho males refusing to admit they were hurt…only to have her go on to do that very same thing herself in the next paragraph. So you made my day actually noticing that one.
Would the fire from the chimney catch the eyes of the bad guys?
Unlikely, Maria. Remember that this is lakeside cabin country – the immediate countryside is full of them. The gang, even if they did see smoke from a chimney, wouldn't think it anything unusual or out of the ordinary. It's something they see every day.
Toc – also happy you had fun with Lois's reactions as that section was enormous fun to write.
The stylish inside of the deserted cabin on the lake is so completely different than what they expected,
Right from the get go, I hadn't ever thought that the cabin was going to be ramshackle – I'd envisaged it as a weekend holiday cabin right from the start. But the idea kind of grew during discussions with my beta – and grew and grew - and I swear by the end of it I was channelling Niles Crane. <g> I'm sure Niles owns that cabin. Certainly, the mints on the pillows was a small homage to Frasier.
She's trying so hard to act like she feels nothing, like nothing is there-- but she slips up and mentions she's "warned [everyone else] off"...
Was also nice to see you pick up on this one. I wasn't really that sure I'd adequately gotten across exactly what was going through Lois's mind at that point – that her given reasons were really just an excuse and she had far more selfish reasons for 'warning them off', even if she wasn't going to acknowledge them. To herself or him. So, great to see it did work for you.
Of the others:
Poor too-silly-to-realize-alligators-don't-climb-trees-and-especially-not-in-the-frozen-woodland
This made me laugh. But the 'alligator' was 'rustling in the bushes', not the tree.
Even Lois knows alligators can't climb trees. I think. Maybe. OTOH, knowing Lois, I rather suspect that the thing larger than a bird up in the tree, she probably thought was a vulture.
Silly Lois. Alligators can't open doors. Only CGI velociraptors can do that.
Love that. Had me chuckling for days. I could just fill up this post with quotes that made me laugh. <g>
"nature's spectaculars" ... ? Indication of sleepy Lois? Indication of sleepy Paul? US/UK thing? Other?
Not aware this has any nationality attached to it. It was simply the way Lois chose to phrase it. I think that within the context of the paragraph it's in, the meaning should be clear though.
Wait a sec. Clark's talking about sports injuries, and suddenly we're back in his POV. Without the little devider thingy. What happened?
Oooooooooh. Good catch!
Thanks again, all of you, for taking the time to comment!
LabRat
