Hi!
This story has so much potential for so many reasons. I like the idea of Clark not having his powers... Also, if they have any moments of honesty while they're there, maybe she'll learn a thing or two, like the fact that her partner is her true love, the fact that her partner is, well, Super, and the fact that her husband-to-be nearly killed him. Lots of juicy potential set up already!
One thing I was curious about what Lois's attitude towards Clark, saying that just because she said she didn't love him doesn't mean he can cut her out of the story. I don't feel like she'd throw his feelings (and her lack of them) in his face like that. It was like a slap, but for no reason. Are there other things that are different from the episodes that aired leading up to your adaptation that weren't mentioned? Something that would make Lois talk like that to Clark?
Anyhoo, I like where this is going...and I see lots more on the board and am going to read...
Nicole
