Dang! People got to say poignant before me. <g>
And it was! And having read Chris's fdk, I'd agree and add that it was nicely subtle too. Really loved this, David. The experimentation certainly worked for me. There was a rhythm to the narrative - accentuated by the way you depicted the ball being bounced (and great prop there for his mood and of time passing - excellently worked in) that flowed very naturally and easily.
The sparseness of the text really worked beautifully within the context, too.
Oh, yes, thought the title was perfect.
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