Thank you all so much for your speedy and positive feedback! I’m overwhelmed by your kind words and hope the rest of my story lives up to your expectations.
Pam wrote:
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<g> but I think you wanted "cheesiest" there... either that or "most cheesy"
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Thanks for catching that. It’s funny how many times I’ve read this, convinced that I typed “cheesiest,” but it was actually never there! I’ve fixed that error.
and also:
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The only thing I'd change, really, would be the line about actresses in Bally's commercials. When I'm reading about Lois, I don't want to be distracted by Teri <g> But that may just be me
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That line shows you just how long a few pieces of this story have been languishing on my hard drive! I think you and Krissie are right about that point. I’ll make an adjustment to this and remove the reference to Bally’s.
Maria wrote:
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Was this Lois idea of warning the rat that she thinks Clark is?
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Be on the look out for a direct quote to that effect in a later part. I love that you caught that!
Irene wrote:
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LOL! I LOVED the pound of Camembert!
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and Laura wrote:
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Something Stinks!LOL Love it.
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The phrase “something stinks” and the idea of an actual shipment of cheese prompted this story to form in my head. But then I thought, what would happen if the worst excuse from the entire show had occurred at the worst possible time for their building relationship? I’m glad everyone’s enjoying it so far!
Susan Young
groobie@charter.net
