Arrrgh.
Way too short.
Good Lois introspection, but I barely had time to get into it before the section ended. Very frustrating, and impairs my ability to get into the story. A section about twice this long would be better... Generally, I try to go for about six pages of my Word document -- which varies from person to person depending on font & margins, etc. But it's usually three or four scenes, at least.
PJ
