Never has grammar been sexier! I just
absolutely love this story...
“I could show you the difference,” he said. Then Clark suddenly stood straighter and retreated slightly, as if he wanted to take back the words.
Lois looked around the bullpen. It was fairly empty for a Thursday night. Their conversation certainly didn’t seem to be drawing any attention. It couldn’t hurt to indulge in a short grammar lesson. Part of her, though, hoped he meant more than that. “Okay,” she said, hardly believing she had said it.
Clark took a deep breath, and a look of astonishment colored his face – he clearly hadn’t expected her to accept his challenge. They stood, silent and still, and the space between them filled with breathless anticipation. He looked into her eyes, searching for confirmation.
This part makes me squeal internally
. That elusive 'line' crossing over between 'friendship' and 'more than friendship'. The dance--that they do so well in the show--is really brought to life here.
He moved away and watched her, waiting for the fallout from his action. Lois stared at him, hoping to understand herself. It was unacceptable – they shouldn’t be kissing in the middle of the bullpen. It was unacceptable – she shouldn’t be so drawn to her partner. The kiss was unacceptable – unacceptably brief.
I won't get into how many times I have read this paragraph. Ummm...how about we just say 'lots'
. Love the word repeat immensely.
“So, in the story, Wanda wants Kent to kiss her, quickly.” Clark couldn’t hide his smile as he said his own name.
That small little detail--the smile as Clark says his name...I don't know why, but I completely adore it. I think, maybe, it's because I can just, so easily, picture the smile on his lips. How happy he'd be, knowing that Lois is writing a novel--thinking about him
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Clark snickered as he shook his head and retreated to his desk. He indicated her computer screen with a nudge of his head. “Every good writer knows you should leave ‘em wanting more.”
Best. Ending. Ever.
Awesome job
Laura
