Hey, Rogue, this is great! I didn't expect to like it that much, since I'm very much a
Lois and Clark kind of a Lois and Clark fan. So my favorite parts of your story, I have to confess, were the Lois and Clark parts. All right, the Lois and Superman parts, I guess, but, well, "shit the same", as we say here in Sweden! I really liked Lois here! And Superman, too. And Laurel! (Uh... that name... Do you know of the Greek legend about a girl who was being chased by Apollo, and to get away from the god she turned herself into a laurel tree? Shit the same...)
I loved the way Laurel seemed so close to her parents. Fly Me To the Moon is her favorite song, because it is her parents' song? Now
that is sweet!
And 666 is the code for MOM! LOL!
I'm not the best Christian in the world, rather the opposite, but I love Biblical references. And there were more here. I
loved it when the "boy" of the story (couldn't you have named him, Rogue?) asked Lois how physically compatible she and Superman really were, and she answered:
You see, I survived the honeymoon, as you tactfully put it, which no other woman on earth could have done, because I am so close to my husband that hurting me would be like hurting himself.
Hurting me would be like hurting himself... Yes, that's love, but it's also the kind of love that Paul tells the Christian men of Ephesos that they must give to their wives. He tells them that every man should look at his wife as a part of his own body, so that the he can't hurt his wife without hurting himself.
There is just generally a delicious sense of humour permeating this story. The way Superman comes through looking ever so slightly comical once in a while, or maybe it's just the way he makes the "boy" of the story cringe! Well, well... messing around with Superman's daughter just won't do, will it? But even Superman can see this boy is serious. So much so that when the boy is talking to himself, saying
Help, Superman, I've got a package for your daughter
it actually gets Superman there right away to act as delivery boy for the flowers!!!!
And I
loved it that Laurel was "mechanically inclined"! Well, with a mother who hates cooking, isn't it somehow logical that Laurel would end up loving to play with carburetors rather than with saucepans? Guess we don't have to worry that Laurel will ever end up unemployed. If she loses that job at the Center for Disease Control, I'll bet she'd be a roaring success as a mechanic!!!!
And then the kidnapping thing, which puts Lois in really good spirits, because
No one's kidnapped me in years. I kind of missed it.
Guess the only thing I didn't much like was the way that the "boy" and Laurel came through looking even more like soulmates than Lois and Clark. But I'm saying that just because I'm the world's most diehard fan of Lois and Clark, not because that is any sort of legitimate criticism of your story!
This was so much fun, Rogue! Thank you so much!!!
Ann
