This is so deliciously, brilliantly in character. I love the push of the pace, and Clark's point of view through the whole thing. The pull and tension of him not being able to stop from saying things because he really DOES want her to know is SO satisfying!
AHHHH, THANK YOU!!!!
This is not the type of stuff I usually write (with this much dialogue and a sort of silliness to it), so I'm glad everyone liked it so much! It was FUN to write!!
and he lifted his coffee mug to take a sip.
“Oh my God.”
He paused with the mug just millimeters from his lips, raising one eyebrow.
I love this suspension, and how she interrupts his motion. Feels like actual staging from the show!
Yay! Thank you! That's what I was going for. Also, that's kinda how I write anyways (seeing the scene in my head, and then...
trying to get that scene onto the paper)
“Lois?”
“Hmm?”
“Lose something? In my desk?”
She finally looked up at him, but the fire in her eyes was a bit intense—and intoxicating—and he stepped backward involuntarily.
Her total lack of apology for completely invading his space is SO Lois and SO fun. And the fact that he's the only one in the world that finds the Mad Dog intensity to actually be a turn-on is somehow so, so sweet.
Hehehehe, YUPPPPP.
Almost thirty years of keeping his secret, and she was about to force it out of him just by sheer persistence.
Love how aware this is. ...and isn't. Persistence AND the fact that he's head over heels (which is so delightfully apparent in the writing!).
Thank you!!
Nearly spit out my tea at terrible-liar-Clark aiming for 'neutral-ish.'
hahahaha! Sorry?
“You made me think that,” she began.
Her turning this around to actually blame
him is sublime, especially with the overall irony of their given circumstances.
GAH yes! LOL.
That ending really puts us in Lois' shoes, too. I would just kill him for that one.
I think he might be in a bit of trouble the next time he sees her
SUCH an enjoyable read - I wanted to pull quote a bunch more here, too. This whole story really tugs on the best of the season one comedy. And the build of in particular really makes it fun!
THANK YOU AGAIN!!
-Bek
