Hey, Shayne, you had me from
“It might be easier to just seek grief counseling.” Dr. Klein stared at her soberly. “The risks of this can’t be understated.”
This is great! As several previous posters have noted, this story is rife with possibilities. One thing's for sure, though, that Lois has already altered her past by being nice to her grandmother and not arguing with her father, not to mention choosing the most modest garments she can find in her closet. Those acts will have repercussions in days and years to come, and I can't wait to see where you go with this.
One thing that might throw Lois somewhere down the line: when she steps into a situation that went "thisaway" the first time but now goes "thataway" and she realizes that she's changed enough of the past that she can no longer rely on her memory of it to guide her. The fur will fly then, you betcha!
The best suggestion I have for you is to keep writing. This promises to be a very original story line, and I'm eager to see what you do with it. I'm sure it will be outstanding, wherever your muse takes it.
