Oh wow! Wow, wow, WOW!!! thumbsup Lynn, this is incredible! The introspection is so lyrical, so heartwrenching, so vivid, and the way you write makes Lois's feelings seem so real! I was particularly impressed by the moment when she realises there was no blood and watches the scene again and again. The mixture of panic and reason battling in her was extremely well done. I can't find proper words to express how this first section moved me; it brought me very close to tears, and few stories have that power over me.

Even though I'm extremely eager to read what comes next (wonderful revelation, btw!), I agree with Wendy that it's better for you to post every other day, so that there's enough time for more readers to comment. smile

Still in awe,

Kaethel jawdrop

- I'm your partner. I'm your friend.
- Is that what we are?
- Oh, you know what? I don't know what we are. We kiss and then we never talk about it. We nearly die frozen in each other's arms, but we never talk about it, so no, I got no clue what we are.

~ Rick Castle and Kate Beckett ~ Knockout ~