"Is he your biological son?" he asked quietly. [Clark] sighed. "Does it matter?"
Sorry but you've lost me. Clark had accepted Chris as his, did you go back and edit some parts? If so please post a list of the parts so I and others can re-read those parts. As it stands his sudden about face, let alone the one Lois does later
Clark's son.
Christopher could be – probably was – but we just didn't know for sure.
don't come across as believable.
If there is anyone major fault with this tale it is this. Your character's emotions zig zag all over the place. It is almost as if you write a scene, later do in between scenes and the events and emotions in these in between scene never last.
Before you send this to the archive you need to do a major rewrite. Trying to read it as one story instead of separate parts will make the retrograde motion stand out like a sixty foot neon sign.
