Originally posted by Terry Leatherwood:
If the characters' emotions zig and zag, that's how real life is, folks....Without a DNA test, Clark and Lois don't know with absolute certainty that Christopher is Clark's son.
Terry,
I am not saying it is not a well written tale. Nor am I saying she needs to change it to suit me.
What I am saying it that the patchwork nature of the posting hides a flaw that needs fixing before she places it on the archive.
In one part she will have L&C acting as if they no longer doubt that Chris is Clark's son.
In a later part they are acting as if they do have some doubt.
Then in another part they act as if they have no doubt.
Then back again to doubting.
If you don't believe me take all the parts in order and paste them into word and sit down and read it from the start.
I should not have used the word emotion. I should have found a better word to describe it. Perhaps paradigm.
The characters, Lois & Clark, their paradigm zigs back and forth. As a result their emotions are all over the place.
As Terry correctly points out changing emotions is normal and does happen all the time. But when these emotions change because the underlying reality changes it is JARRING to read.
It is sort of like those early TV programs when the actors changed clothing going from one room to the next and back again as they re-entered the first room.
