Hi Kathryn,
I've been away for a while and this was one of the first stories I saw upon my return. When I started reading it and saw that Clark was dead, I almost stopped without going further. (My angst fuse has a low amperage threshold.) But very quickly it felt familiar. This is there the sequel to "Hurt; Lois' story" isn't it?
Anyway, after working my way through the beginning, I was pleased to see that there is a chance to fix things. However, the idea that there is a delay where Lois has to be an observer in her old life is wonderful. Then the idea that she will only have a limited time to fix anything before her memories fade is also a great idea. So, the question becomes how big will the window be and what can she do during that time.
Neat ideas.

I'm looking forward to the next part.
Bob