Corrina,
I'm confused
by your preview and wonder if you need an adjustment in the pronouns for the following in the following (3rd sentence):
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Or because he was letting down his guard and allowing her to see his suffering?
Was he beginning to trust her?
Or had something happened to her that meant his pain had become her pain?
In other words, did you mean for the 3rd sentence to read like this?
"Or had something happened to
him that meant
her pain had become
his pain?"
Right now it makes more sense to me this way, but it certainly may not to you.
Thanks for your wonderful story!!!
