I agree with Lynn, it's definitely WAFFY.
I admire Clark, really, because I know I couldn't be so generous if I were so hurt and angry - and I don't think I'm the only one ! Often in the show, I prefer Lois, maybe because I feel close to her nature. But they matched perfectly, and that's why the dynamism of the couple is so efficient - and it's probably for the same reason that I prefer the seasons one and two.
Anyway, I'm exactly like all of you, and I felt as if something was missing during the episode with the almost wedding. I like the way you express the reasons why Lois acts like this - I think it's true, even if she never told it in the show. And I was surprised not to be ennoyed by Clark's feelings. On the contrary, I shared his pain. Nuances are described very well indeed. And you show him so noble that I softened as Lois did. In fact, you're very fair with him. The two characters wouldn't blame you for this story.
Besides, it's kind of pleasant to see the revelation part without an angry Lois. I so love the angry Lois, but this version is sweet and, again, very fair. Because Lois is often unfair - I remember when she's mad at im because he lied to her although she's lying to him all the time. I like the fact that Lois realizes that it's her fault too if Clark didn't tell her the truth. How could he, when she's acting so differently with him and his alter ego ? And Clark had to realize that he pushed her to have a crush on Superman. I'm not the better to judge English writing, but I liked yours. It was very clear and nice.
Oh, and I agree with Lois about the safety of Luthor, although it is very funny to read. She can defend herself against anything but feelings.
I'm sorry for this long explanation, but I thought I could work on my English in the same time =D
