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The In-Between Moments is a series that rewrites, elongates or adds scenes. Most of them take place in between major plot moments. Some of them slip easily into the ongoing canon, while others roll right into an alternative universe. They’re all one-shots, usually plot bunnies that strike when I’m supposed to be working on something else. They're short, not connected, and in no particular order -- and they usually have happy little endings.

I wasn't going to post this, but Sara mentioned that it was the one-year anniversary of Ficlet Friday, so I thought I'd join in for the first time! Happy Anniversary to everyone that's kept this going for a full year! I'm happy to participate.

This is just some angsty little fluff that is no longer an ending to one of my other stories coming up. It was a challenge to see if I could actually write a full conversation/chapter without words. I also wanted to play with what happens when you take away Lois' ability to DO something. Usually her mind starts working overtime. But when she can't solve the big problem, her coping mechanism to investigate sends her looking to solve something else...

No beta on this one, so any errors are my own.

The story is located here: IBM: Darkest Before the Dawn

Thanks in advance for any feedback, always including constructive criticism.

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Really awesome alternative take on that episode. I liked Lois' inner thoughts and her reevaluation of Lex. I laughed at the coffee bit and immediately thought "It might not improve Lex's mood but it would improve Lois' " rotflol

Also liked her interaction with Clark. And I do wonder if Lois had experienced those reservations in canon if she would have investigated Lex before it was too late.

Anyway, enjoyed this a lot. ^_^

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Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!! I loved this so much!!! Gahhhh that silent communication this is hard to do but soooo good! That’s their thing! And I want to leave more detailed feedback but they gave me all the good drugs for anesthesia and pain today for surgery…so energy is low. lol

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Love this!!! Wonderful rewrite/fix, and Lois reaching the conclusion that Lex isn't right for her that night--AHHHHH! that just SOOOOO fits!!!

Plus, the silent interaction between L&C is just PERFECT! love


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But he had gotten her through it. They'd been stronger together than they had apart. To her, that seemed extraordinary.

He held out his arm to her.

It turned out that she wouldn’t have to deny their silent exchange during the night. He seemed content not to push her about the intimacy she’d allowed, instead offering the reliable chivalry that she'd started to believe in again -- because of him. They'd both let her confessions stay behind them in the dark, and she'd make sure they focused instead on what the light of the new day would bring.

She slid her arm into his, pulling herself close to him, and she felt her heart speed up when he smiled earnestly at her in response.

Better, she thought again.

Together, they walked toward the sunrise.


LOVE LOVE LOVE this ending!! SOOOOO perfect! clap

Thank you for sharing!

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I loved the silent exchange between Lois and Clark. Good that she's noticed she'll never have this sort of connection with Lex. Awesome ficlet. Thanks for sharing.


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Awww. This was sweet, full of warm and fuzzies. A much better ending to the episode.

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BlueOwl, it WOULD have improved Lois' mood! But I decided to give her the opportunity to grow here, instead of following her usual impulses. jump
Thanks for stopping by to comment. I appreciate it.

Sara, thanks so much for letting me know about the anniversary! I'm glad I got to participate. And I hope your surgery went well, and that you're recovering quickly and painlessly!

SuperBek, Thank you SO much! The non-verbal bit felt really risky to write. And I'm definitely working on wrapping up endings a little more fully after Undercover Reporter. lol

Bakasi, I don't even think I made that exact connection in my head that she could connect to Clark this way, but not Lex - but it's so suspect that she can talk to Clark about Lex but not really talk to Lex about Clark. When we see Lois missing her friends in the series, Lex is already so in her head that all the interactions are sort of tainted by his mental games. Thanks for reading and commenting on this one!

Toomi8, awwwww, thank you! It definitely feels so much better when this pair is on the same page, right?

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Great fic! This was a much better ending to the episode. I like how Lois realized that she didn’t have a connection with Lex, couldn’t even lie next to him, but she had that connection with Clark. That was perfect! Thank you!

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This is so well written, and not an easy scene to write either! I like this ending much better! It's funny, I open a fic and I think I know L&C, but every time I read a new story I feel like I get to know them even better. That rings especially true here as I definitely got new and just deliciously wonderful insights into their relationship with this story!

favorite lines:
“She could walk into a room for the first time that day and he’d make her feel like he knew exactly what was going on in her head. He was always the first person she looked at when new information hit the newsroom, banking on him sharing her reaction, or at least being at the same level, even if he had a different take. And he was always ready to anticipate her when she did something that everyone else judged erratic or spontaneous.”
I LOOOOOVE this insight!! All the feels!!!!!

“They used words as play things between them, to joust, to tease, to paint the world they saw together in a story. But they needed precious few words to really communicate.”
ACK! Melt!

I love that when he gives her one of his “megawatt smiles” —“When she closed her eyes, she could still see it.” UH! So good!

“The job is right, she thought. It might be dangerous, but it was exciting and challenging, too. She was good at it, and it was a way for her to really make a difference in the world”
I love this!

“Well, you’ll have to forgive me, my dear, but with your history, you can understand why I might have a hard time believing that, hmm?”
Oh this is SO perfectly Lex! I can hear his voice reading this!

“instead offering the reliable chivalry that she'd started to believe in again -- because of him.”
So true!!!

Really just wonderful. Thank you so much for sharing this!!


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Songbird, thank you so much for commenting! You flatter me! I'm so glad you liked how this turned out.

KateSO, thanks for such a great, detailed reply! It always brightens my day to see which lines connected with people! And you're right - totally a weird, hard-concept scene to write, and I'm not sure I nailed it. But I'm so, so glad this opened up a new nuance for you. I'm always trying to go a little deeper in finding what makes their characters work so well together.

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Oh this is SO perfectly Lex! I can hear his voice reading this!
I really appreciate this. Lex has an arrogance to his erudition that I don't find natural to write - so it's always a little stretch to capture Mr. Luthor!

Thank you, again, for such kind feedback!

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Hi Evie!

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In an increasingly alt-version of Fly Hard, the intrepid Planet team (and Luthor) end up spending a longer-than-scripted night trapped in the conference room.
Hmmm…besides from a wild ride I got no clue what to expect. Only Lois and Clark, on the dark side? Sure, there’s expectations. But the entire gang on the light side? No clue at all.

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She’d spent too much of the evening twisting the uncomfortable cuff around in a frustrated, nervous tick once Lex had been shot. It had started to chafe about half an hour after that.
Should have asked them to use the vanity cuffs from Cat’s desk drawer. They got padding.

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While Perry catnapped across the chairs,
CAT: When I lobbied for a big sofa for the conference room, Perry had told me to keep the bedroom at home. Pfft, as if I need a couch for that.

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She’d been excited enough to be in the belly of the beast on this heist when she thought it meant she’d get a story out of it. But with every hour that had passed, she became more uncertain that she’d end up being around to submit this.
It’s funny-sad. Is that something you can say? Dunno. It still is.

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And, most frustratingly, Superman hadn’t shown up.

It wasn’t like him to ignore a call like this. Maybe he’d been hurt?
Just waiting till Lex has enough blood loss to blabber the truth. Or go silently into that dark night.

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Maybe it was the lack of sleep getting to her, but she had a weird feeling that he was stuck in some kind of bad situation tonight, too.
Kinda, yeah.

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Next, she’d blamed the environment. Her loveseats might be uncomfortable, but her mattress had a luscious feather topper beneath Egyptian cotton sheets. The floor couldn’t compete. Plus, it must be filthy.
LOIS: Plus, Superman could visit at home. He often does.
Also:
Cat never desanctified the conference room floor.
CAT: There’s a perfectly good table right there.

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Or, at least, her physical proximity to Lex.
Yes, he is icky and old enough to be her father.

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with a quick mind and a bent toward the philanthropic
He does like to make champagne from lemonade. And that’s ‘lexanthropic’.

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She should be so lucky as to be sleeping next to him right now, in any situation.
sick

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Either way, she was currently weighing the options of either gnawing off her own arm or filching Jack’s paperclip to free herself, buddy system be damned.
Option three: break that bone in your palm that prevents the thumb from folding in and slipping free.

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. He had always come to her when she’d needed him before
He’s tied up with his buddy right now.

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On the other hand, Lex had named himself de facto leader, but then gone rogue at the first opportunity
He wanted to lead the way out the door.

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He hadn’t brought any of the others in on his plan.
LEX: It was obvious. They should have known.

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Lois wasn’t sure she agreed with his leadership style.

Or the results.
It’s called Lex Prime. It’s a favorite technique at the School of Opportunity.

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This was better. The crawling sensation diminished.
Lex behind you should be be even creepier.

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And he was always ready to anticipate her when she did something that everyone else judged erratic or spontaneous.

Somehow, Clark could keep up.

They used words as play things between them, to joust, to tease, to paint the world they saw together in a story. But they needed precious few words to really communicate.

Not that she’d never admit it.
Beautiful section clap

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Tomorrow she’d write this all off as a response to the panic of the moment and the stress of being held by criminals with a nuclear device, and she’d make sure he knew it, too.

But tonight, for once, she’d let her guard down and indulge.
clap this reasoning is something I have in one of my WIPs, too.

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he was proving to be surprisingly adept at reading her emotions and making her feel better.

His eyebrows rose lightly, giving him a more open expression.

Even now, he knew her mind well enough to see it was moving on to another topic.
They are adorable!

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And at first, sure, it was interesting, even flattering! But why am I dating a man that makes me want to chew my own arm off?
Financial security? She likes men who are as obsessed with Superman as she is herself?

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. I doubt we could learn over laundry and breakfast dishes — and I bet Lex doesn’t even do all the little normal things like laundry.
I was going to say that…

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I wanted something extraordinary,
Something… super?

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What if my life ends while I’m chained to this man? I don’t want to just be remembered as the reporter who was dating Lex Luthor when she died.
laugh he truly is her ball and chain.

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Had their exchange in the night even been real?
Who knows? And why did they let her sleep on the floor? Maybe it was all a hallucination, induced from some party drug or other Lois did while out on the town with her rouge boyfriend?

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It must have been, because he’d kept his promise to her. He was still angled toward the gunmen, watching them through the doors.
Oh, it’s not over yet.

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She tilted her head to look up and realized that she was resting on a human pillow.
Which is why Clark is unhappy. Is it wrong to have hoped he’s unhappy because Lex passed during the night?

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Had he awoken to find her cuddled next to Clark, hands clasped? Or had Clark left her side before Luthor woke? She guessed that would be a fun surprise to learn later.
Including the question which of those would be less fun to learn.

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Instead, she sat up, dislodging the possessive grip that had been agitating her shoulder.
Great phrasing on her feeling and interpretation of things.

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? She reminded herself that he was in pain, and it probably wouldn’t improve his mood if she dumped the hot coffee over his head.
Only one way to find out.

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Taking a sip, she found it didn’t steady her. It was off somehow, too, like the rest of her usual touchstones today. That’s what she got for not making her own coffee for a year, she supposed.
This should be telling!
CLARK: I promise, I never use the sugar packs and real creamer from the coffee station for Lois’s coffee.

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She was a person of action. But last night had been about waiting to see what her captives would chose to do with her and the people closest to her.
That was another great insight clap

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. “Lex! Don’t sneak up on a girl who’s just been held hostage!”
So, *never* do that to Lois?

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The best Italian food you’ve ever tasted.”
Slightly longer commute?

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“You know, my dear, your friend didn’t show up last night.”
He was tied up.

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Her mind sputtered. Her friend had been next to her all night, holding her hand. He’d been the only thing to soothe her during —

Then the penny dropped.

Lex was talking about Superman.
Awww

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She was getting mad. If Clark could practically read her thoughts in the darkness, she would have to consciously shield her emotions from Lex now that they were standing in the clear dawn light.
peep

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but he’s sort of a trustworthy colleague, at best.”
Someone like Henderson?

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She glanced back to see Jack standing beside Clark, tugging on his sleeve to get his attention.
Eavesdropping again?

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Honestly, how long had he been patronizing her without her seeing it?
Uuuuhhhh… 19 episodes?

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Well, she thought, as break-ups go, that could have been worse.
Don’t worry. It can still deteriorate.

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She snorted. “I just lived through a nuclear threat as a hostage. I’m not giving one of the Metropolis cabbies a chance at killing me in the same day. I’ll run out of luck.”
She’s a cute one.

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She chose her next words purposefully.

“You’ve got a date,” she said, watching a happy light enter his eyes.
Awww

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She slid her arm into his, pulling herself close to him, and she felt her heart speed up when he smiled earnestly at her in response.

Better, she thought again.

Together, they walked toward the sunrise.
This was another great outing!

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It was a challenge to see if I could actually write a full conversation/chapter without words. I also wanted to play with what happens when you take away Lois' ability to DO something. Usually her mind starts working overtime. But when she can't solve the big problem, her coping mechanism to investigate sends her looking to solve something else...
I love this insight of yours! And it's embarrassing that I didn't even notice you did no talking the entire time blush

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Hi Michael! wave

Thank you so much for the feedback!

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She’d been excited enough to be in the belly of the beast on this heist when she thought it meant she’d get a story out of it. But with every hour that had passed, she became more uncertain that she’d end up being around to submit this.
It’s funny-sad. Is that something you can say? Dunno. It still is.
Yes. And thank you.

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Or, at least, her physical proximity to Lex.
Yes, he is icky and old enough to be her father.
Ugh, yes. I can't even think about it when I'm writing it. Sam really screwed his kids up.

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with a quick mind and a bent toward the philanthropic
He does like to make champagne from lemonade. And that’s ‘lexanthropic’.
rotflol OMG, that's a great one!

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This was better. The crawling sensation diminished.
Lex behind you should be be even creepier.
You're definitely right here, actually. But I had to set up my little foil. wink

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They used words as play things between them, to joust, to tease, to paint the world they saw together in a story. But they needed precious few words to really communicate.
Not that she’d never admit it.
Beautiful section
Awww, thank you. blush

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Tomorrow she’d write this all off as a response to the panic of the moment and the stress of being held by criminals with a nuclear device, and she’d make sure he knew it, too.
But tonight, for once, she’d let her guard down and indulge.
this reasoning is something I have in one of my WIPs, too.
It's an interesting toy to play with right? Lois is so impulsive, so based in instinct and action that I think she just uses that to justify behavior sometimes. Just keep moving forward and maybe no one will notice! lol Looking forward to reading your WIP!

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I wanted something extraordinary,
Something… super?
Exactly something like that! Google: "thesaurus + super" thumbsup

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What if my life ends while I’m chained to this man? I don’t want to just be remembered as the reporter who was dating Lex Luthor when she died.
he truly is her ball and chain.
Oh, man, I laughed out loud at this. That's such an easy joke, and it just cracked me up.

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Had he awoken to find her cuddled next to Clark, hands clasped? Or had Clark left her side before Luthor woke? She guessed that would be a fun surprise to learn later.
Including the question which of those would be less fun to learn.
Oh, man, yeah. I don't know which Luthor woke up to, but it makes me glad to dump this universe and move on to something else. Because I'm guessing this would get dangerous as time goes on. I just drop them in hot water in these stories and move out!

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Instead, she sat up, dislodging the possessive grip that had been agitating her shoulder.
Great phrasing on her feeling and interpretation of things.
Thank you so much!

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She reminded herself that he was in pain, and it probably wouldn’t improve his mood if she dumped the hot coffee over his head.
Only one way to find out.
You know, I'm really grateful for this comment - I wrote another short last night where Lois is distinctly not dumping a wine glass over someone's head. She needs to resist in that one for silly reasons like 'plot' and 'continuity' but I think I need to start helping her behave much worse that I've been writing her. Maybe that'll be another challenge - let Lois break things. crazy

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but he’s sort of a trustworthy colleague, at best.”
Someone like Henderson?
Well at least ONE OF US managed to get Henderson on this thread. clap Just breaks my heart when I can't add him into a story.

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She was a person of action. But last night had been about waiting to see what her captives would chose to do with her and the people closest to her.
That was another great insight
Thank you. blush

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Together, they walked toward the sunrise.
This was another great outing!
Thaaaaaank you! Everything else I'm drafting right now is so heavy that these are becoming great little

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It was a challenge to see if I could actually write a full conversation/chapter without words. I also wanted to play with what happens when you take away Lois' ability to DO something. Usually her mind starts working overtime. But when she can't solve the big problem, her coping mechanism to investigate sends her looking to solve something else...
I love this insight of yours! And it's embarrassing that I didn't even notice you did no talking the entire time blush
That's not embarrassing - that's a tremendous compliment!
I've been trying to work on not over-writing the sections between dialogue. So... I wrote a chapter without any dialogue at all. Naturally. wallbash

Thank you for taking the time to read an respond so thoroughly.
It's always such a pleasure to walk through stories with you!

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This story is a master class on how to communicate everything to the reader without using dialogue. Your descriptions set the mood and let us know exactly how everyone was thinking and feeling. Honestly Lex was such a creep! Clark was soothing. Lois took a good long hard step and realized Lex ain't the one.

Brava!


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You're definitely right here, actually. But I had to set up my little foil.


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Looking forward to reading your WIP!
Umm...part 1-3 of the hopefully 4-part WIP are up over yonder - "PML - The Whole Story". Sara's been hounding gently encouraging me on part part 4.

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Oh, man, I laughed out loud at this. That's such an easy joke, and it just cracked me up.
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Because I'm guessing this would get dangerous as time goes on. I just drop them in hot water in these stories and move out!
laugh Yeah, so, Lois & Clark, you just had fun. Now, go on and figure out how you get yourself out of this mess. Tada wave Michael

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You know, I'm really grateful for this comment - I wrote another short last night where Lois is distinctly not dumping a wine glass over someone's head. She needs to resist in that one for silly reasons like 'plot' and 'continuity' but I think I need to start helping her behave much worse that I've been writing her. Maybe that'll be another challenge - let Lois break things.
rotflol I have a scene and story where I got stuck after Lois's inner thought on Clark ended with "Clark might be a bit messy at times, but at least he knew how to heel".

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Well at least ONE OF US managed to get Henderson on this thread. clap Just breaks my heart when I can't add him into a story.
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That's not embarrassing - that's a tremendous compliment!
I've been trying to work on not over-writing the sections between dialogue. So... I wrote a chapter without any dialogue at all. Naturally. wallbash

Thank you for taking the time to read an respond so thoroughly.
It's always such a pleasure to walk through stories with you!
Aww...you're very welcome!

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Morgana, thank you for such kind words! Lex AIN'T the one, amirite?? razz
I always appreciate you reading. This one was definitely more experimental, so I'm glad you had fun reading!

Michael, I will definitely go looking for PML - The Whole Story! Very excited to add it to my 'to be read' list!

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"Clark might be a bit messy at times, but at least he knew how to heel".
THIS. IS. HILARIOUS! So on point for Lois and so funny! rotflol

Thanks, again!

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