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Oh, goody, I get to be first. I don't have time for lots of feedback, but this was an absolutely beautiful part.


And it just begs for a steamy sequel....

Please?

oh I love the ending where she tells him she needs Clark. Brought me to tears. Great revelation and great conversation and totally waffy.

I love this story and if you want to blame DJ for killing Lana, it was my idea in my story.

I am rooting for a sequel!!!

Awww so sweet! I love it!

I'll just put in a big ditto to all the previous posters! Loved the ending.

This was great!

Julie

Oh nice job very sweet and romantic. Laura

Oh! Wow! I loove it!
I'm a little sad though to see it end. I vote for a sequel.
I just love everything about it.
Sigh, I LOVE this.
I love that Lois said she need Clark.

I'm off to bed with this great story on my mind.
Thanks DJ for a lovely read.

Sequel? Hmmm, I don't know... where would a sequel go? I mean given time I'm sure I could think of something, I just hadn't planned for one...

But WOW! Thanks! I guess that means you all really did like the story if so many of you are clammoring for a sequel.

Nancy - thanks... I suppose if I were to do a sequel you'd be expecting it to go in the *n* folder huh? <DJ shakes her head, smiling>


Tahu -

Thanks! I'm so glad you loved it. And don't think the idea hadn't crossed my mind to point my finger at you and say "it was her - she made me do it" Hee hee - even though that wasn't the truth...

There's that word again - sequel

Thanks Jackie! So glad you liked it - I got them together, just like you were hoping I would. :-)

Julie - Thank you! Glad you loved it.

Thanks Laura! Thanks for the fdk!

SPark --

Awwww! "Sad to see it end" - how sweet of you to say! Thank you! "Love everything about it" -

You are so very welcome!

Thank you for all the comments on this story - it's what I live for. As my beta said one time - it's my drug! Thank you to all of you who stuck with me through it - even through that awful cliffhanger! (Thanks again for the button by the way -- tee hee).

I don't know about the "sequel" - I'll file it away for future thought. I've got 2 other fics I'm working on right now. But thank you for liking it so much that you'd ask for a sequel - that was... wow... thanks.

Brava MetroRhodes! Nice ending to a great story. I really appreciate the revelations where Lois doesn't get quite so mad.

Plese write again soon!

Hi Sheila! Thanks so much for the comments!

Yeah, well I figured he came clean with her pretty much right from the start, so how could she be *that* upset with him???

Thanks! I'm working on another one right now. The first part has already been sent to Sue for beta... but it'll be a while before I'm ready to post.

It's horrible to say, but I am glad you killed Lana. If she had lived after that wreck there is just no way Clark would have been able to go to Lois, at least not very soon. And I was wrong before, you did tie it up quite nicely.

The whole revelation scene was lovely. You have written a grown-up Lois: she comforted him about Lana and accepted Clark's secret so well. And then...

Aaah! That line made my day.

Can we please, please have a sequel? Maybe even an nfic sequel? We will promise to love you forever... we promise!

Thank you, DJ, for a great story.

Everything's happy! At first the familiar Superman scene came to play, and I was just like, if this ends on a Superman note, and Lois and Clark don't have a conversation...I should have had more faith.

Jen

Hi,

Great story.

Nicely done.

Now could you have them elope? Quick before anything can go wrong?

Loved the story. Although I 'm just a little perplexed about something Lois said:

I'm all for the fact that Superman can't be everywhere all the time and that whatever he can do at best is enough. I said perplexing since I think Lois could've better worded the first sentence instead of it coming out as if someone else's death, or Lana's in this case, is really of no significance or holds no importance. She WAS Clark's girlfriend. I would have maybe suggested she told Clark somewhere along the lines of " You shouldn't blame yourself..." or " You must understand that you're only one man..."

Again, would've preferred if it was said in the collective.

But hey, I'm just a reader not a writer. I'm not at all a Lana fan- never have been. And I agree that Lana and Clark weren't meant to be - no dispute on that. So her character being written off is no big deal. All the more reason for Lois and Clark to have a happily ever after. I was just pointing out how Lois came off to me with her choice of words in this particular scene.

Oooh! The comments keep coming! Thank you everyone!

Lisa --

I agree that Mr. Imaboyscouthavetodotherightthing might not have left her as easily after the accident, if she had been okay. The guilt would have gotten to him.

Oh WOW! Thank you Lisa!

Eeeeh hee hee! Okay, since there are so many of you out there clammering for this... no promises... and only if I can come up with something believeable and not "smut for smut's sake". I'll think on it and see what I can come up with.

Jen --

Yes, have a little faith...

Thanks Jen!

Maria --

Thank you for the fdk and for following the story - I was glad to have you along for the ride!


Framework4 --

Ha ha!

mmprincess --

Yes, but sometimes that can be a good thing. You readers out there catch so many boo-boos that the writers may not catch. See as we proof our stories, we read them so many times that we eventually go cross-eyed. And I'm not just speaking from personal experience. One of the writers I beta for tells me all the time that she's "looked at a part so many times that she's just sick of it".

So we can miss things.

That's the great thing about these boards. We can post our stuff here and you guys get to take a look at it and tell us what we can improve on. That makes us better writers.

So thank you for that. I'll definitely give that part a second look before posting the story to the archive.

I'm glad you liked the story though and appreciate your fdk.


Thanks so much everyone!!! You made my evening!

Okay, time for some mini-feedback....

I already knew that Lana was going to die, because DJ had gracefully told me, so I can't pretend to be upset. I think, to be honest, that it is a little sad that Lana would have to die so that Clark could be free of her. Couldn't he just have said, "Lana, it's over?" All right, he should have put it a little more nicely, but still.... One of the most talked-about criminal cases in Sweden in recent years involved an admittedly horny pastor who couldn't say "It's over" to the woman he was currently involved with when he wanted to move on. The details of what happened to his first wife are murky, and there was never enough evidence to charge the pastor with her murder, but he was found guilty of talking his ex-mistress into murdering his second wife while he was having an affair with the woman he wanted to marry next (not his ex-mistress, a fourth one). Ah, well... he didn't know how to break up with them, you know?

I'm glad, anyway, that Lana's crash was so bad that Clark couldn't have saved her even if he had gotten there faster. He shouldn't have to feel he was that guilty of her death.

I love it that Clark needed to talk to Lois afterwards. So, he chose to go to her as Superman:

I thought this Lois was really very nice to Clark and not bitchy at all. Would she really have been that upset with Clark? I would have liked it better if he had seen her straight away as Clark. Of course, admittedly, if he had we would have missed that scene between Lois and Superman, and that was a really good addition to the story.

So Clark says a few words to Lois in his Superman suit, and then he flies off:
So, eh, what was that little stunt about? He wanted to impress her, right? He was testing her? He wanted to see if she would throw Clark away now that she had had a whiff of Superman? I mean, if he wanted her company, seeing her as Superman really wasn't a good idea.

Okay, good. He is being somewhat honest with her.

Clark....
No, you shouldn't. First of all she really liked you when she only knew you as Clark. Second, if she is so impressed with Superman, why don't you just tell her that you are him?

Ah! Clark has been so lunkheaded ever since he refused to tell Lois his secret. I love it that she is giving him what he was craving for here, acceptance. And love!

And this is adorably sweet.... Thank you.

I'm really glad that Lois knows and understands about Lana, and about Clark's feelings of guilt and sorrow right now.

I love it! This is such a sweet Lois. Surely you can see that you can trust her, Clark? You should have seen that long ago.

Finally, lunkhead.

Yes... yes....

Noooo!!!!

Exactly, Lois. You see, you are dealing with Mister Red, Blue and Yellow.

Oh, good, good, good! Yes!!!!

I like the ripping of his shirt!

Good. Finally. Finally. Yes.

Yup. Mister Red, Blue and Yellow.

Very good question....

There have been a few suggestions in some fanfics that Clark might just possibly be a Catholic boy - well, whether he is or not, you are hereby named his Mother Confessor, Lois.

Yes, you should be ashamed, Clark.

Oh, horrible question.

Her question brings him to his knees and he replies that he more or less killed Lana by choosing Lois over her.... DJ, this is heavy.

Okay. Lois will understand this better.

I love how she embraces and comforts him.

Good, Lois! What you said is so true, and he so needed to hear it.

This is so, so sweet, and.... Guess what? I said this would be some mini-feedback. Guess how late I am by now?

Gotta stop here, DJ. I really, really liked the story. I, too, wouldn't mind a sequel.... (You know what I mean. )

Ann

Well, DJ, it could be pretty steamy and still stay in the PG folder. You know what they say about imagination... nfic would be good, too...

In a way, I hated to see Lana die, but the way you did it was wonderful. I liked that Clark wasn't wracked (sp?) with guilt.

Oh, I like this - cute... Might make an interesting little story.

I love this...

I love that you do this. (I do, too.) I've said this before, but I hate trying to read a fic when the author hasn't even taken the time re-read it and it's absolutely full of misspellings and bad grammar. Yes, sometimes we do go cross-eyed proofing and will always miss some things, but you can tell when someone has taken time with their story. That means a lot to me and shows that you care.


Ann noted..

Clark a Catholic boy? Nah, I don't see it, but then we all bring our personal experiences to a story and I'm not Catholic. I've never heard this one before, but I do see him being raised in a Christian household.

Hi,

I've only just read the last sgment. It is moing, sunny and very well written.

You just have to love the way Lois babbles.

I really liked the way that she finally put two plus two and made four!

I'm putting in my request with the other... More please!?!!!!!!

Regards,

SNL

Ann --

Yes, no getting mad at me - I warned you in advance.

True... but Clark *IS* a lunkhead sometimes. And after everything he'd been through, he wanted to be able to talk with her first as someone she wasn't upset with. He needed a little *lift* and he knew she'd talk to him as Superman. Plus, as you said, it was a nice little lead in to his visit to her as Clark - I took literary liberty here.

See you admit too that he's a lunkhead. Hee hee.

Thank you - I'll take that as a compliment.

See my answer at the bottom of this post...

Again... see my answer below...


Thanks Nancy. Yes, I do care. In fact, I usually re-read it at least once even after I post... and usually still manage to catch at least one more thing that I'd like to change and so I have to go in and edit my post.

Thanks for the feedback SNL! More?

Okay, now my response:

For those of you (Nancy, Tahu, SPark, Lisa, Ann, SNL...) who suggested there should be a sequel or more or whatever... I have written an epilogue for you. (Lisa said "we promise to love you forever" - how could I refuse?)

Last night my husband had a few guy friends over and they watched football. I hung out in my bedroom of sanctuary, watched a good movie, and wrote an epilogue.

I wish it was done - I really wanted to post it this morning as the final, final edition to the Breakfast Club - but it's not done quite yet - close (and then I as told Nancy, there will be all those read throughs and corrections to make).

Anyway, it's 7 pages so far and all WAFF. However, it can't be posted on the PG boards. So you'll have to look for it in the nfic. I hope to have it posted at least before bedtime tonight. Hubby's going to be gone tonight so that should allow me to finish it.

Love you all for your wonderful comments and naggings for a follow-up... the squeaky wheel gets the grease remember...

Thanks!!!

Yea! /me very excited.