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FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38431 02/03/07 04:32 AM
Joined: Jul 2006 Posts: 1,883 Florida M MrsMosley OP Merriwether
OP MrsMosley Merriwether M Joined: Jul 2006 Posts: 1,883 Florida	I am glad that you have themselves questioning each other as to why they feel so connected already. It makes it more realistic and also shows they aren't taking it lightly. I love the interaction between Martha and Lois. Makes me wish Martha was around to hug me. Quote If only she’d let him in a little, see that he wasn’t here to hurt her. Clark, she already did let you in, if only you knew how much. It makes me angry that Lois had to hear that from her father, but it's almost as bad that Clark had to hear it. Listening to awful words like that about someone you love can hurt almost as much as hearing them about yourself. lisa in the sky with diamonds

Re: FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38432 02/03/07 04:55 AM
Joined: Aug 2005 Posts: 5,797 T TOC Nobel Peace Prize Winner
TOC Nobel Peace Prize Winner T Joined: Aug 2005 Posts: 5,797	I loved the strong emotions in this chapter. I loved the scene with Lois and Martha, and I absolutely loved how Lois and Clark confessed the connection they felt to one another. I was rather horrified at Sam. I wonder, will he try to come for his daughter as soon as possible and "rescue" her? Ann

Re: FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38433 02/03/07 06:41 AM
Joined: Aug 2005 Posts: 738 Germany Tahu Columnist
Tahu Columnist Joined: Aug 2005 Posts: 738 Germany	oh I loved this chapter. Keep them coming. The story is so cute. I didn't like Sam in the serie and I don't like him here.

Re: FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38434 02/03/07 11:11 AM
Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 3,644 North Carolina, USA C ChiefPam Pulitzer
ChiefPam Pulitzer C Joined: Apr 2003 Posts: 3,644 North Carolina, USA	I thought the scene with Lois crying on a mother's shoulder was very poignant, because I'm sure that was a very rare occurrance for her. Glad she had the chance, even if she had to hurt her ankle first. We girls always feel better after a good hard cry. And then Sam went and wrecked it... grrr. That was horrible. Oh, and speaking of 'wrecked' -- the proper phrase is "wreaked havoc." Not a major quibble, but I thought you might like to know. So when's part 6 going to be posted, eh? PJ

Re: FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38435 02/03/07 05:56 PM
Joined: Oct 2003 Posts: 1,363 Savannah, GA Sheila Top Banana
Sheila Top Banana Joined: Oct 2003 Posts: 1,363 Savannah, GA	Quote “A boy? No wonder you don’t want to leave, you damn slut.” Clark heard that and froze, mindlessly squeezing the knife in his hand. It crumpled like tinfoil. His mother gasped, unaware of what was causing the reckless loss of control for Clark but she had to snap him out of it. She lightly touched his shoulder, but he didn’t respond, merely furrowed his brow and listened. “—it’s not like that Dad! He saved me. I almost died.” “Right. The car crash. That was your mother’s car! You’re causing so many damn problems. If only you’d have been a son. He’d have managed to make it through a little road trip without crashing the car.” Lois was crying softly, horrified and yet unable to hang up. “Cry you damn bitch. Just like your mother. Go get down on your knees for some country hack and enjoy a little roll in the hay. Then come crawling back to me when you’re pregnant and alone.” OMG, that was absolutely horrible! But, I'm glad that Clark listened in and now the Kents can come to the rescue. Poor Lois. This was a very well written part and somewhat emotional. Please come back soon! I'm a firm believer in the fact that God doesn't put any more on us than we can bear. He does however make us come to Jesus every so often.

Re: FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38436 02/04/07 03:13 AM
Joined: Jan 2007 Posts: 1,006 Laura S Top Banana
Laura S Top Banana Joined: Jan 2007 Posts: 1,006	blushes... aww you guys are much too nice to me. Mrs.Moseley Quote It makes me angry that Lois had to hear that from her father, but it's almost as bad that Clark had to hear it. Listening to awful words like that about someone you love can hurt almost as much as hearing them about yourself. I agree, wholeheartedly. Ann- Thanks! And I've written this story completely before I posted it and now I'm rather regretting the decision. It's nice to hear feedback and suggestions on what to do and how the characters might act. Thanks for the comment. Tahu- I didn't much like him either. :rolleyes: PJ- blushes thanks for correcting my error. I think I've gone through my whole life spelling it that way and my past English teachers haven't ever caught it. And I agree, crying is a nice stressbuster. And part 6 should be posted tomorrow. I figure nobody will be on to read it if I post it today (Superbowl Sunday and all) Sheila- Never fear, new post tomorrow. Thanks for the review! Thanks to CapeFetish for the awesome icon.

Re: FDK: That Charming Smallville Hospitality Part 5/14 #38437 02/04/07 04:24 AM
Joined: Jun 2006 Posts: 2,638 Likes: 45 Germany bakasi Pulitzer
bakasi Pulitzer Joined: Jun 2006 Posts: 2,638 Likes: 45 Germany	I just caught up with your story. It's amazing, Laura. I love it! You portray young Clark so well, I can totally feel how lonesome he is and what meeting Lois means to him. Sam Lane is really a bad guy in your story. Could qualify for the best villain in the next year's Kerths. I'm curiously waiting for more, keep up with the good work. Thanks for sharing such a great story! It's never too dark to be cool.

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