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I like this part very much. The idea of Clark being a teacher is really fantastic and I'm a little jealous. We never had teachers like him.  I think it's an interesting problem you're dealing with. I like it that Clark is on the side of less popular students who are clever. And I think that his encouragement is the only way to help them get through school happily. I mean, it's really tough when everyone calls you a geek. In the first part I was a bit annoyed that he didn't admonish the girls who were picking on Dana (I think it was her). But the more I think about it - it would have made things only worse. On the one hand Clark understands so much more than a couple of teachers I had in school. But when he tries to save Lois form girls like Jill - I don't know if that's such a good idea. Martha's letter was great. I can almost see her behind her computer, worriy written all over her face. This is so much like her. Very well done! Great part, Laura. I enjoyed it very much!
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Yes, good ol' ma Kent giving her boy a boot up the backside. Shame though, poor Clark. Come here and let me kiss it better for you... But seriously I can't see that he's going to get over his wife's death any time soon. Disasterous dates, sobbing in the shower  Part 4, where are you??? 
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Great chapter, Laura! I like that Clark tried to save Lois from Jill - my dad was a teacher and he used to say the same thing, that he hated it when good kids fell under the influence of bad ones.
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Forget Harry Potter and leave us with something good to read before you go on vacation! LOL I really like this story. August will be here soon, but it is a long time to wait for the next chapter.
Have a GREAT vacation!
thanks!
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I second that! I'm hooked and can't wait for the next part.
This part was great! I really liked that Clark is already looking out for Lois--protecting her is in his blood. It won't be long now before sparks start to fly, and in my opinion, when they can't act on it right away it will only heighten the suspence. I also can't wait to find out what Lois has up her sleave. Those girls don't stand a chance against her! You've done a great job so far! I'm looking forward to reading more soon.
Have fun on your vacation!
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Laura, I have to say that I am hooked on your story. I love this new premise. I can totally see Clark being a teacher. I just wish that Lois would not be so annoyed with him and maybe tell him what she's doing. He doesn't seem attracted to her...yet...just concerned. Maybe the red flag has gone up and said "Student...Off limits!" He was glad Lois Lane had joined his class. She seemed like a good kid and one who would add some diversity. Despite her passive answers today in class, he had caught a glimpse of fire when she had argued with him over a point in the novel. He had never encountered a student who contradicted his views on the novels in class. It was a refreshing change. He’d have to keep his eye on her. Maybe he’d found his last Ready Writing team member. Isn't this always what attracted CLark to Lois Lane, beyond the physical? He ability to go toe to toe with him? Boy he's in for a treat.  “Please Jill, you can call me Mr. Kent.” Clark took a deliberative step backward and gave her a hard glare. That was it. He wasn’t letting Lois leave with this girl. She was a menace. Clark tactfully put the little tramp back in place. “Sorry Mr. Kent, but I have to leave,” Jill said breezily, apparently recovered from his rebuff. “Lois, you coming?”
Clark searched his mind wildly for something to say. He had seen students get mixed up in Jill and Lexy’s crowd before and it wasn’t a pretty transformation. “I can drive you home!” he finally blurted out.
Jill gave him a cool once over.
“Sorry Mr. Kent, but I don’t think that would be very appropriate. Come on, Lois,” She slipped her Gucci sunglasses over her eyes and sank into the low slung car. Lois gave him a slightly apologetic glance before getting in herself. Clark had to jump back to avoid his toes being flattened as Jill sped out of the parking space at an illegal speed. I guess this is Jill's way of getting back at CLark for turning her down. “You mean Beth Warner?” Lois held her breath. Beth Warner was the name of the girl who had died last year. She recognized her mistake an instant later as Lexy’s eyes grew startlingly more sober.
“I don’t even know who that is,” Lexy said harshly. She grabbed Jill and tried to stand. “I think it’s time we got another drin—whoa.” Lois was on her feet, keeping both girls steady before they tripped and fell. It was definitely time to go. She had befriended the girls she thought might be involved in Beth Warner’s murder and it was only her first day. As she grabbed the keys from Jill and shuffled them out the door, Lois grinned. Whoa, Lois. Careful girl. You're moving too fast. Clark may just have to break out the super powers and save you, I only hope! Well done, Laura and hurry back! ~Sheila
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Hi guys! The feedback on this chapter is a little less contraversial thank goodness. Bakasi-- The idea of Clark being a teacher is really fantastic and I'm a little jealous. We never had teachers like him. Me either. Dangit. That'd be so wonderful if we did. I'm glad you liked Martha's letter! That was fun to write. I like writing about Clark's parents. Anyway, thanks for starting off the feedback thread and leaving such a nice review.  gr8shadesofelvis-- Hey! Yes it looks like Clark is pretty broken up about Lana. But it has been two years... I think it's about time for him to start moving on. *whistles innocently* Unnedited on my harddrive!  But to be posted ASAP when I get back. Lisa-- Hi! Thanks for both this feedback and the one on part 2. Usually being one of "good kids" in school, I remember how I felt when some of my friends fell under the influence of some bad kids. I hate it when that happens too. Glad you're hanging in and reading. rkn-- I finished Harry the day I got it, lol. I'm writing, I'm writing! Before I leave I'll send off a large chunk to be beta'd and then I'll post as soon as I get back! Thanks for the feedback. symbolicangel-- I second that! I'm hooked and can't wait for the next part. Ee! I'm so glad you said that. I thought the beginning went a little slowly so I didn't want to lose any readers. It's a huge relief to tell me you're hooked on it anyway. And there is some action a little later. I really liked that Clark is already looking out for Lois--protecting her is in his blood. It won't be long now before sparks start to fly, and in my opinion, when they can't act on it right away it will only heighten the suspence. Thank you! I agree. I like things that keep them apart for a little bit. It makes the end all the waffier. And I think that no matter WHAT universe it's in, Clark will always be protecting Lois. I just love his character. Sheila-- I can totally see Clark being a teacher. Me too! I'd so love to learn Shakespeare from that man... I figure he'd see teaching as a way to help without the use of his superpowers. He doesn't seem attracted to her...yet Keep that ...yet in mind. I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you everyone! I feel so inspired to go write more. *scurries off to Microsoft Word* --Laura
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This story is just perfect! And the high school setting is something that most of us can still relate to, even if it's been years . . . or decades . . . since we were in school.
I was surprised to see all the previous FDK where people were concerned about Clark falling for a student, and I noticed that you made it clear in this chapter what his thoughts were on that. But I was never worried. For one thing, you can be attracted to someone who's underage, but being attracted to someone doesn't necessarily mean falling into a sexual relationship. Clark isn't the predator type, or he wouldn't be Clark, and the story really wouldn't belong on these boards. So even if he fell for a student, he would wait until she was of legal age before he tried to take the relationship past friendship. And if he's anything like the Clark in the series, he'd give her plenty of time to make sure she was comfortable in the relationship and then he'd still wait until their wedding night for anything to happen. But he can move into a romantic relationship more quickly here, once he finds out Lois's true age.
One thing did seem out of place to me--I think Clark said he'd introduce Lois "real quick" and I think an English teacher would have said "real quickly." But I apologize for criticizing ANYTHING because I have so much admiration for your writing ability! I really can't wait to read the next chapter--please don't make us wait too long!
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I've been wanting to get caught up on this story, and I'm so glad I finally had the chance tonight. I love it, Laura! You have a great setup here, and I can't wait to see where you go with it. I'll be looking forward to the next installment Best, Caroline
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Ahh, Laura! Wonderful part. I'm sorry my feedback is so late - being on holiday means everything happens later, doesn't it? I love that Clark is refreshed by Lois' arguing and I hope that we do see more of that between them - I'd love to see how you write it too! I'm definitely looking forward to Part 4. So when did you say you're getting back from vacation? ~Anna.
Lois: Jimmy, give me back my dress.
Clark: Now there's something you don't hear around the newsroom everyday.
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More feedback! Okay. cookiesmom-- Ahh, thanks for the sweet review. And the high school setting is something that most of us can still relate to, even if it's been years . . . or decades . . . since we were in school. I agree. Plus it's just a fun time of awkwardness and new things. One thing did seem out of place to me--I think Clark said he'd introduce Lois "real quick" and I think an English teacher would have said "real quickly Oops!  That was my mistake. I fixed it. Thanks so much for pointing it out! I really appreciate the feedback. I'm so glad you approve of student-Lois and teacher-Clark. Don't worry, he WILL find out about her. Sometime. Caroline-- I'm glad you're reading! The next installment will be posted as soon as I get back. Probably Aug. 5 or 6. I'll try and make it longer too. I just sent off a chunk to be beta'd, so hopefully I'll have some backup chapters and thus freak out less. Anna-- No problem! Yes, holidays do mess things up. I'm supposed to be getting ready for mine right now but really... packing... Lois and Clark fan fiction... packing... you know which one wins my vote. But I brought my brother's DVD player so I can watch some episodes on the plane! I'm glad you like the story so far! Look for some more action in the next few chapters. Laura *edit* Oh, what the heck. I posted chapter 4. All the compliments went to my head.
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Originally posted by Laura S: [QB] One thing did seem out of place to me--I think Clark said he'd introduce Lois "real quick" and I think an English teacher would have said "real quickly Oops! That was my mistake. I fixed it. Thanks so much for pointing it out! Granted I'm not American, but I can't resist. Where I come from he'd say "really quickly" *ducks head to dodge missiles* PS. I think "real quick" sounds the best.
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Thanks to gr8shadesofElvis for pointing out MY mistake!
You said: "Granted I'm not American, but I can't resist. [Embarrassed] Where I come from he'd say "really quickly"
*ducks head to dodge missiles*"
Yes, an English teacher probably would use both adverbs correctly. In my defense:
1. the use of two words in a row ending in "ly" sounds a bit awkward.
2. my dictionary's definition of "real" says that in informal conversation, it means "very" or "extremely." (Random House College Dictionary, an older version).
3. I hear people use "real" as an adverb all the time (which doesn't make it correct, I know.)
Sorry for the digression, let's get back to the story!
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Just catching up. I haven't been on-line all week. Hubby was out-of-town visiting his mom (she's been in ICU for almost 3 weeks now) and I've been a crew-leader at VBS. That hasn't left me with a lot of down-time. Anyway, just when you thought you'd left the contraversy alone you come up with "really quickly" ... or is that "real quickly" ... or is that "real quick". Hmm... And I have another thorn to throw into the pot. After those blatant advances on her part… it was obvious it was just sour grapes, but she had another thing coming if she thought he would ever in a million years come on to one of his students. This seems to be a British vs. US idiom, but there was another contraversy on the board awhile back. Does she have another thing coming? Or does she have another think coming? I had always said another thing coming, until I read this Another thing/think coming . I've now adjusted. The British way of saying it just makes more sense. Of course, Clark is an American. This Clark doesn't sound as our Clark either. I liked the big meeting. Actually, it sounds to me like Lois is much more taken with Clark than he is with her. Interesting. Elisabeth
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<sniffle> Poor Clark! He wasn’t allowed to turn abandon them. And that was when he had thrown himself into teaching with a steadfast determination. It was really all he had to live for at the moment. His smile turned wry and self deprecating. His mother would tan his hide if she knew he had dark thoughts like that tumbling through his mind. <raises hand> ooooh, pick me, pick me!!! Can I tan his hide? LOL. Sorry... It was only when he had breathed against her skin a whispered name that everything came crashing down around him. His date jumped off of him, miffed and hurt as Clark hazily tried to realize what was wrong. As he slowly came back to reality, he grimaced and jumped off the bed, grabbing his jeans and shoving them on.
“I am so, so sor--”
“Go to hell!” Awwwww - that's so sad! How could she be so cruel??? I mean maybe if she didn't know his circumstances... but if she did??? Where is she? I wanna slap her! *ahem* Hah! Loved Martha's email. <g> He had grown to accept everything. He had already experienced the love of his life and he was grateful. There wasn’t anyone else in the world for him and he was all right with that. Oh, Clark! How wrong you are!!! Just wait till Lois gets through with you - you won't know what love is. <g> “I can drive you home!” he finally blurted out. LOLSSS!!! Oh god, you have no idea how hard I laughed at this. Poor Clark, he was just trying to keep the "kitten" from the "lion" but that was just WRONG. LOL!!! Ha ha! Okay, great chapter. I'll be reading 4 shortly. Thanks! -- DJ
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