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If I read the first passage right, Superman encounters two men on the bridge. One is a captain who is the commander of the vessel, and the other is an admiral. The second passage at least makes it sound like three men besides Superman are exchanging glances. I am pretty sure you either want to reword the people on the bridge, or reduce it to two men exchanging glances.

I do have to say I did enjoy the interchange though.

Clark:I should give myself more excuses if it gets Lois to touch me like this.

I have to say "stay to higher ground" seems a bit odd. I guess it works though, and maybe it is the best phrasing. I would have said "stay on higher ground", but maybe this form works better. I don't know.

Considering he thinks if he had worded the instruction more as a command she would have listened, I think she is right that Superman still does not come close to understandign Lois.

Also, I am not sure MPD jurisdiction would cover that far out at sea.

I am pretty sure this should be "back to your place".

Lois:And it also has a lava lamp.

Clark:None of that now.

Lois:So we can do it later.

Clark:That is not what I said.

Michael: I believe I'm almost caught up.
Or it could've not been set up by Rourke at all.



He's thinking cuddle and talk. She's thinking something else.

CLARK: So, the DP then?

LOIS:

Slime she needed to wipe off her shoe?

Or she could finally be seeing the light?

Yes, let's see how far your money will take me, is quite the rejection... although she doesn't want to end up visiting the manor house.

Wedding? Who's getting married?

LOIS: Not me! Well, not anytime soon. And not to that rich guy. And nobody else has asked. Actually he never asked either. So, definitely not me!

Thanks. Fixed.

Commander is also a rank in the navy. I changed it to "the Commander, the Captain, and the Admiral..."

Thanks.

Right now the difficulty isn't getting Lois to touch him, but getting her to stop.

I think either works, but "on higher ground" is the normal way of saying that phrase.

CLARK: I knew I shouldn't have left that Handbook that other Clark gave me back in alt-dimension.

Good point.

Fixed. Thanks.

Technically, Clark *did* give her a lava lamp for her birthday, so she has one too.

I have to say that I agree that Clark should at least consider the issue of who Lois might tell. I think he is a bit too worried about this, but I guess I also know that Lois can not stand Lex at all, something that he does not know. Also, it is not like Clark has actually not told Lois anything because of this. His not telling Lois is a result of there not being a good time, not because of fear she will run to Luthor.

I think it would be unrealistic if he at least did not weigh this issue. Luthor even getting a hint that CK=SM would be really, really, really bad.

Completely, actually Michael

Which is why it is something he considers.

Ooops. Not anymore.

Not to my recollection.

On a scale of Evil Dude (1) to Superman (10), I think alt-Clark currently rates an 8 (all that lying and stuff), but flash-frying Lex would make him drop under 5, which wouldn't be good for "Hey, I'm the good guy" image.

LOIS:

LOIS: oh, just a little pin a rat on the donkey... or was that pin the donkey on the rat?



No, sorry. The slime in this instance was Lex.

Nah!

SAM: Uh... okay... But, Clark, why are you bringing oxen again?

CLARK: <<shrugs adorably>> I don't know. Lois said you needed them.

SAM: Okay.

LEX: I've got a hundred oxen!

SAM: I don't want oxen!

LOIS: :rolleyes: Men!

BATMAN: Let me check that again…

Michael

I thought Batman doesn't kill people, either. I just watched 'Batman Beyond' and he freaked out and gave up being Batman because he almost shot a guy who was trying to kill him.

I'm sorry, why is Lois desperate when Lois took her joke about the 50 oxen seriously?

Your right. In one SM/BM cross-over comic, Batman convinces SM not to kill someone who claims that killing him is the only way to save Lois Lane from dieing. Fortunantly it was a lie, and Lois was saved another way. It still was one of the road-blocks in their relationship, that Clark chose sticking to his principals over saving Lois.

Huh… No idea. I only remember how a lot of the violent criminals ended up in a freezer in the Batman movies.

By preferring he just pay her father her weight 250x in oxen and marrying her rather than continuing this dance of won’t they or won’t they.

Michael

What? Superman TOLD her what he did?

LOIS: See. Lunkhead.

BATMAN: They could've opened the door and escaped with their lives. It was their decision to die, not mine to kill them.

This quote was taking into consideration that I don't remember this happening in a Batman move and therefore cannot remember the context.

And if I remember correctly doesn't Batman kill himself at some point, so I guess he does kill people, doesn't he?

Also, it could be argued Ghost Clark's sacrifice at the end of "Another Lois" was a bit of killing himself, so I guess Superman does kill people too.

LOIS: Well, how was I supposed to know he was Superman and could accomplish that?

But if I understood the end of "Another Lois" Ghost Clark really ahd no control over the re-set. That was caused by the actions of H. G. Wells.

Freezer as in morgue. There’s the Nicholson-Joker. The Penguin. Harvey Dent. His ex-girlfriend he let die by saving Harvey Dent. Didn’t his current girlfriend also die in the last movie? Not sure how many of the goons bit the dust.

Oh. My bad.

Michael

GHOST CLARK: What! I didn't have to give up my soul rights to Lois?! Stupid lunkhead!

BATMAN: I deny having to have anything to do with their deaths. Just because I might have hit some of them with my flying bat-stars, so doesn't mean that I'm guilty of their murder should they die of a staph infection received by improper care at the hospital.

Michael

One of the things I like about this story is that the narrator calls Clark/Superman "Superman" when he's Superman. A lot of LnC fanfic I've read has the narrator refer to him as "Clark" no matter what he's wearing, even when all the other characters in the scene think he's only Superman. It gets really confusing having Lois and Inspector Henderson and whoever talking to "Clark" and then finding out halfway through the scene that he's in a cape, and they're talking to Superman.

All in all, this is an enjoyable story to read, not only because of the engaging plot, but also because the writing is clear. I always know who is speaking, I always know whether Clark or Superman is in the scene, and I'm not tripping over bad grammar.

Plot-wise, I'm frustrated at what an idiot Clark is about Lois, but that's totally in character for him. I also get the feeling that the soul-mate curse wouldn't apply to this Clark with this Lois, but I can see that Clark wouldn't want to take that chance. Usually I hate the curse plot-line, but here it works since we've already got Lois dealing (albeit unknowingly) with the repercussions of losing her true soul-mate and falling for a pseudo-soul-mate.

To really clear the air between them, Clark of course has to tell her that CK=SM and that he's from another dimension. He entertains the idea of telling her CK=SM without telling her the other, but I've been wondering what would happen if he told her that he's actually from another dimension without telling her about Superman. Would she believe him? It might clear up her questions about his past, and he could tell her about H.G. Wells, and even the curse, which would explain his recent behavior. In the long run, though, I'm not sure that that would do much good without telling her everything, since I don't think they can have a real, solid relationship without her knowing both secrets. Which makes me wonder whether telling her he's Superman without telling her about the other dimension is worthwhile.

Whew! I'm glad I finally found these boards and got signed up. It's nice to be able to respond and rant about a story I'm reading, rather than just keeping it all pent up inside. :-)

Well, technically he has told her about the other dimension, jsut in a tone where she did not actually believe him.

I guess in theory once you have a world with Superman, inter-dimensional travel should not seem too difficult. So maybe he could tell her about it and get her to believe it.

However I don't think he expects her to accpet the curse ever, so I really don't see him pursuing that angle. I mean, in canon they only accept the curse because Wells has proof, and I think that is largely Lois fueling the skepticism. I figure that is why alt-Clark accepts Wells word for the situation here.