Yes, I'm afraid that I have a problem with this section too, Sara.
Much as I love your writing, and much as I've been enjoying this story so far, I think it's
far too much of a coincidence that Lois would start saying exactly the same sort of things as her double has been saying out on the street, just at the right time and just to the right person. There were lots of things she could have said to Superman, but to accuse him (or almost accuse him) of failing to save Lex Luthor right then, right after her double had done the same, required just too much of a leap of credulity for me.
I could imagine, for instance, her asking him whether he'd known the truth about Luthor and if so why he hadn't told her. That, I would think, might be her first question, and it would still work with her still angry with Superman. Had he wanted to humiliate her further? That would be one reason, she might think, for not telling her the truth about Luthor. (I have to say, too, her excuse about wanting closure or to 'say goodbye' didn't really ring true for me either).
But, as it is, I just can't believe that they had that fairly lengthy conversation and Superman's flown away still convinced that it was Lois out on the street - and that Lois didn't realise they were talking at cross-purposes.
I'm sorry to be negative, Sara, especially when - as I said - I've been enjoying this story. But this section just didn't convince me, and what's worse is that I suspect that it may be a pivotal one.
Wendy
