Sara, some powerful writing here.
You've really showcased the emotional upheavals in all their rawness. The inner turmoil is relentless.
I do think you are treading dangerously along that line of angst for angst sake. I have to agree with Wendy that some of things presented didn't quite make sense. I was a bit lost following Lois' chain of logic (or illogic) from the 'why he didn't save Lex' to the 'why he rejected her declaration of love'. It seemed to hinge on her believeing that Superman could allow a man to die because he hate him, yet she claims she doesn't think he would do that. Maybe that needs to be clarified a bit.
Also, the whole argument at the end would be cleared up if Clark admits to his secret identity, which, I got the impression, that he was ready to do. We need to know why he doesn't want to 'settle' things by telling her the truth.
Powerful stuff, but a tad confusing for some of us who aren't quite as immersed in the inner workings of super angst
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Tank (who thinks it would have been fun if Clark brought up the Lois meeting on the street, then Lois really would have thought Superman was nuts)
