Well, this story just flew in and landed in my head at 3:30 a.m. one day, and then it practically wrote itself in a manic frenzy over the course of a few days.
/squints/ you’re not supposed to dope your muses. /points at guidelines for proper muse care/
LOL! I didn’t do it on purpose…who knows what she gets into on her own!
He'd effectively shot himself in the foot. The longest, most passionate kiss he'd ever shared with Lois...that feeling...oh, God, that feeling of her total abandon, her lips crushed against his as he'd turned and dipped her—as if they'd been dancing—so he could have better access to her mouth.
Trying to remember. That’s the Superman kiss, isn’t it?
Yes!! And would you believe that kiss is
25 seconds long?? I timed that sucker! It was a LONG kiss!
Unless he wanted to pursue her as Superman.
Wouldn’t be the first time. There’s got to be an entire sub-category on this topic alone.
…I actually have a plot bunny or two…
"As long as you're being honest with yourself, Lois," he teased.
Okay, good thing that the rewatch is coming up because I don’t remember how much of that was show and how much is original. I mean the last two paragraphs of course. But the rest, it’s a mixture?
I think most of it was original!
He tuned into her heartbeat because he couldn't help himself. It was a little fast, but slowing to normal.
He’s a bit of an addict, isn’t he?
He IS! Especially in my stories because… GAH, I’m a sucker for him listening to her heartbeat.
he could keep up with Lois logic
Is this possessive Lois and a typo or is it ‘Lois logic’ with Lois as a qualifier?
It’s the latter… hmm, maybe I should change it to Lois Logic for clarity…
"Are you sure you're okay? You're a bit slow today. I meant, it's fine if you don't like me like that."
It’s just, he’s really interested in Superman.
About that…
It's fine because I know now that Superman loves me
Oh that’s evil!
Right?? But it’s directly from the show! This is what spawned the whole thing… I was meant to be watching HiM for research on a Fade to Black story
but thought I really ought to watch the episode right before it first… enter PML. And right before that mega-long kiss, he says, “Lois Lane, I love you.” For EVERYONE to hear! What a freaking lunkhead! So yeah.
Oh. There it was. Again. Hoisted by his own...spandex.
And ouch!
Haha, right?? And thank you! I was very proud of this line!
He scratched at the paper with his pencil, drawing a square and writing a big, fat zero inside. He tapped the pencil nervously against the page.
Nice action beats!
“What do you mean? If there’s something you—did he tell you something?” she asked, dropping her pencil and sitting up a little straighter and adjusting her shirt.
You’re doing a bang up job with the actions to the dialogue.
Thanks!! I love hearing that! And I love that this one flowed so easily — because sometimes it feels like these don’t come off as well as I’d like.
He...but Superman wasn't...real. He didn't need to relax because Clark did that. He...
Whee! Thanks!
"I won't even tell him I love him. That's not important right now—" His eyes went wide. "You love him? Love him?" He didn't know if he was shocked or angry or thrilled.
Hmm…I may need to note this down for a Kerth nom. It’s kind of an…okay story so far.
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Awwww thank you!!
Anger roared in her eyes, her nose flared, and her hands were fists at her side. And then she stormed past him through the open conference room door, yanked open the door to the stairwell and disappeared behind the door as it slammed shut behind her.
And now she’s ticked off. Only question is, did she also figure it out?
Not at this point, but she’ll put together the pieces soon enough!
Hee hee!
He did too, and like a song, he finally heard her heartbeat fill his senses.
Awww, great work with the heartbeat build up.
Oooh thanks for noticing!!
"You can't kiss me like that and say you're not real." Her eyes darted to his lips briefly.
Another of my favorite lines in this fic!
Thank you SOOO much for all the wonderful comments!
Oh my, I loved it! I know there's a lot of PML rewrites (or add-ons, like this), but that's just because it's one of the best episodes and exploring other alternatives is so much fun =)
KSaraSara, there are so many wonderful lines, I can't pick my favorites. Lots of
Thank you to Michael for resurrecting this thread!
-Bek
Thank you, Bek!! I’m so glad you enjoyed!!
Sara
