Good job, DJ! This was a very well done story!
Loved Lois's reaction upon finding out the secret. Not letting him in, and then when he went on to 'reveal his secret'...
There's something I'd like to point out, though.
This story is too long to drag on and on without a scene break. I understand that you never leave Clark's POV, but I found it a little overwhelming and tiring to read. And it's such a shame, really.
“I’m sorry Lois. I...” And before he even realized what he was doing, he was in the air, flying. He didn’t even know where he was going; he just flew. *** He continued to fly around for a few hours just thinking, trying to decide what he needed to do. After averting a few minor emergencies and making a couple of rescues, he finally ended up at his parents’ house. When he touched down on their front porch it was dark out. The sky was alight with a blanket of stars.
You could insert a scene break where I put the asterisks. Same with the parts where you change place, or move quickly ahead in time.
Other than that, it was a great story. Keep up the good work!
See ya,
AnnaBtG.
