This is a really good start. I love stories surrounded around BatP/HoL. However, it all runs together. In your next post, instead of the way it is written, please space as follows:
Clark stood there, frozen in front of the park bench not able to say anything. *This wasn’t true!* he hoped that his ears betrayed him for the first time in his life. But they never had and certainly didn’t start it right now.
Lois watched him expectantly, waiting for his nod telling her, Superman was almost on his way to her apartment. But she wasn’t going to get it.
“Oh, I understand.” Clark said with a joyless laughter that sounded unusually rough for him. “How can Mr. Hack-from-nowheresville even consider having a chance compared with Superman. Or with the wealthy Mr. Luther. What could *I* actually offer?”
He glanced at her with disappointment and wished that he had never become the man of steel. Why had he encouraged her so much while wearing the suit?
“You get that wrong, I’m not attracted by his powers. It’s the *man* inside the suit I’ve fallen in love with. His bravery, his honesty, his moral standards. If he didn’t have powers I would love him just the same.” Lois replied softly. “It has nothing to do with you being human.”
All of the sudden Clark went pale and Lois could see that he was fighting with tears.
“Oh, Clark, I’m so sorry.” She tried to soothe him.
“Do you really believe, what you just said? You would barely notice him, if it wasn’t for the spandex and his ability to lift rockets into the orbit.” he blurted out.
Hot rage of despair was burning inside him. Why didn’t she see that Superman wasn’t for real and that her future fiance was evil? He wanted her to notice him, he wanted it so badly, that he feared to hurt her by accident. This was getting dangerous. But his rage hadn’t yet subsided.
“Clark, there’s jealousy speaking.”Lois remarked matter-of-factly.
“I’m not jealous!” he growled with anger.
But...I love it and am looking forward to your next post. I'm on the edge of my seat here to see what happens when Lois goes to see Clark.
