Your English is very good. I agree with Sheila - please put spacing between your paragraphs. If you are having problems with cutting and pasting try saving your file in text format and then paste it to the board.
I think this is a great start and look forward to more!
I do have one other comment and I speak as a nurse with psychiatric experience who has worked with many suicidal patients. If no one is going to end up really being suicidal in your story, I'd suggest a name change to perhaps just 'Despair'. On another note, I can understand Clark becoming suicidal. Afterall, I made him suicidal in A New Hero after Lois died.
More soon please!!!!
