I loved that first part. I always found Clark a little too gentle. I LOVE IT when he shows anger, and just after Lois reject him and ask him to contact Superman is definitely a moment where he should be very angry. So, I love it.
I am a writer, and my native language isn't english either, so I fully understand your difficulty with writing the story. I know very well how we can feel when we struggle with every word of a simple sentence. But keep it coming, you're good.
And I agree with all the others: put spaces between your paragraphes next time. It'd be a lot easier to read you if you do.
