I'm combining my feedback for both in one thread. Hopefully, that's OK. Since one is the second part of the first and all of that...
Mona, first of all *yay* on posting your first story!!
May I suggest you change the message icon to a little blue arrow on your posts? (edit the entry and then change that, right under the title) It will make your story easier to notice for everyone.
I think you did a good job of portraying our favorite couple in this. I like how Lois was a little freaked out about things - that's very much like her. And Clark is just his usual sweet and caring self, and we love him this way.
The second part was really very sweet. You did a great job with Klein, by the way - I could totally see him confused when he asked what Superman was doing there and then his reaction to the truth was so very amusing. Very much like the character on the show! The ending was sweet and waffy and... awww! just perfect.
Nice work, especially for a first story. Oooh! And I think this fit the request really nicely, too - which, trust me, I know how hard it can be to give someone what they wanted. (huh, Sue?!!)
