I could not get into this feedback thread fast enough. What a pivotal chapter. Dare I hope that Moyne is gone for good? Maybe he could get hit by a bus too?
I was actually going to comment about something from the end of the last chapter but you revisited it in this chapter too. Scardino's comment...
"Ms Lane," Scardino said. "I have been concerned that you are getting too personally involved with this assignment. I think that you have allowed your judgment to be impaired. It happens to all of us in this job."
Even before seeing Lois's POV, I thought that he was being unfair in his assessment. Without being inside her head, there really hasn't been any indication that she's become personally involved. To the impartial observer Lois's behavior could result from wanting to ensure that the prisoner's conditions are more humane b/c she is an honorable person and not to do with any kind of personal investment. I find Scardino's blind eye in the blatant disregard for the abominations that have occurred almost a passive support of Clark's treatment.
I love Lois's assessment of the situation.
In order to ensure that she remained on this assignment, she needed to break all communication with the prisoner. She had to be impersonal, remote, and unequivocally professional.
This frightened me.
... Or she had to ensure that Scardino believed it had stopped ... and keep Shadbolt and Longford from suspecting it had started.
Lois gave a small smile. Work in secret? Maintain a charade to cover what she was really doing? Lie when necessary? Appear detached? She could do that.
This made me much happier.
This made me dissolve into a puddle of warm gooe.
As for the rest the setup with Longford and Shadbolt seems good on paper. Hopefully it will work out to be so.
Your teasers at the beginning of the feedback are torturous! Are you posting on any sort of schedule? Can't wait to read the next part. It just gets better and better!
