Very well written, Paul, and quite engaging! I'm pleased this is going to be a once-a-week thing, as it means it will last for a long time and we can have lots of fun speculating.
I particularly liked that you showed ramifications from previous events in LnC's lives. Too often, we think in episode terms: credits roll, and it's as if the events never happened. I loved that Lois had to worry about Baron Sundy suing, or the NIA worried about the progress of their investigation!
One minor edit for you:
We'd lost several days' worth of wedding planning time, thanks to my little extradimensional "vacation," and we were still working to catch up.
You
did say that this was an alt-S3, of course, but didn't Lois return almost instantly? I understood that time passed in the alt-verse, but not in "our" LnCverse. Wasn't Clark still sitting disconsolately in the alley when she came back?
As for what Lois should do... I think most of the previous commenters have covered my initial instincts. I will add that she might go to the top of the DP building and yell, "Help, Superman!" once or twice, just to make sure.
Heaven help Luthor if he's the secret admirer, though.
I'm really looking forward to this, Paul!
Hazel
